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Gitmo playlist

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I think I got this article as far as I can apart from a few minor things, but I'm not super experienced with writing, nor was I super familiar with this topic before I started researching. I was hoping to get some feedback to bring up the quality of the article. Thanks, Based5290 :3 (talk) 07:31, 27 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Airship

Article looks generally good, and ready for a formal review process like GA, which I've kept in mind while reading it. My only comment is that the title chosen is somewhat odd. By the looks of it, there are four names for the "playlist", but no actual playlist is known to have existed and the songs seem to have been more semi-randomly chosen by guards. In addition, most of the article is not about anything that can be called a "playlist", but instead about the mechanisms and reception of the torture. I would thus suggest renaming the article to "Auditory torture at Guantanamo Bay" or something similar.

You may also want to expand the background section to go into more detail on use of auditory torture by US forces outside Guantanamo Bay. For example, this 2003 BBC News article talks about auditory torture being used in Iraq. You could also specify specific songs or incidents: see this list of songs used on prisoners, or this fairly comprehensive source published by a subject-matter expert, so you don't have to worry about WP:SELFPUB. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 23:57, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The title apparently came about from someone copy pasting a bunch of text from a newspaper to start this article, but I wouldn't be opposed to changing it. However, by a very rough count, only about half of the sources focus on Gitmo specifically, while the others generally lump it in with the other detention centers. Maybe it should be renamed to something like "Auditory torture in the War on Terror" (which should be as simple as moving some info from background to use and changing a few words around)?

Thanks for the suggestion to include more information in the background section and this review in general. Based5290 :3 (talk) 01:25, 1 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Z1720

Comments after a quick skim:

Per MOS:ALLCAPS, titles in a citation probably should not be in all caps.
Some paragraphs are quite long, making it hard to read (especially on a mobile device). I suggest splitting up some of the paragraphs: my recommended target length is 4-6 sentences per paragraph.
Wikimedia Commons might have some images that could be added to the article.
Additional places that you might find sources are Google Scholar, Archive.org, WP:LIBRARY or your local library system.

I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 14:11, 29 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]