Talk:Loop of Jade

Peer review by classmate

Reviewed by FutureWigs (talk) 17:22, 26 June 2019 (UTC)FutureWigs

Lead

The lead immediately tells the author, significance of the article, and gives a short description of why the poetry collection was written. This lead has everything it should and gives a good opening statement to hook the interest of the reader into the body of the article.

Structure

One minor thing the article could use is a table of contents. I think the article is structured well, I do believe that more tabs could be added to cover more ground on the subject of the poetry. For example, a tab detailing where the poet got their ideas from and the process of creating the poems. Tabs featuring more information like this not only adds depth to the information of the poem presented to the reader, it also adds more length to your article. The "Poems" tab of the article is a stub. There needs to be more details about what you're trying to convey to the reader about the poems, the tab itself is mysterious. (I'm sure as the article is continued and expanded upon the tab will become clearer.)

Balance

While the article provides a lot of info, the balance between the "Poems" tab and the "Reception" tab is noticeable. A lot more is written about reception than the other parts of the article. It goes back to the example I gave earlier, try to put as much information as you can surrounding the book, think out of the box for headers.

Neutral Content

The content remains neutral and provides no opinionated writing or bias.

Sourcing

The citations are very reliable and provide context on the paragraph they are linked to. If you can, it would be nice to cite an online copy of the book as an "external resource".

Conclusion

This article has a lot of potential and I believe you are on the right track to creating a great article. The information box already makes it look like an official article. With some more tabs of information (with citation of course), this article will be great.

Note

The "Content" section (that's a better title than "Poems") is severely underdeveloped. Plus, it's not poems, since you're just mentioning one (not in italics please: quotation marks for the title of a poem). This needs expansion. Also, remove the second person. I need to hear about form, structure, rhyme, etc. Also, the "Reception" section needs cleaning up. No inline URLs, and organize it as text, not as bullet points/sections. Incorporate quotes properly--and expand on it. Dr Aaij (talk) 01:38, 28 June 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review

I think the first sentence should say, "Loop of Jade was the first book of poetry by Chinese-British poet Sarah Howe." You need more in the content section, but you definitely have a good start. I believe you have a good amount in the reception section. All you really need to do is find more information. Good job so far! Bmichelleh (talk) 15:58, 1 July 2019 (UTC)