Talk:History of Key West/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Bronson Fotiadis1 (talk · contribs) 03:51, 26 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Borsoka (talk · contribs) 11:40, 4 December 2024 (UTC)Reply

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

C. It contains no original research:

D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
Is it neutral?
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Comments

Congratulations for your first nomination. You will soon realise that I am not a native English speaker. Please ping me if any of my comments is unclear. Consider my comments as recommendations and feel free not to accept them but inform me about your concerns. Confirming that the article meets all GA criteria is my only concern during the review. Borsoka (talk) 12:43, 4 December 2024 (UTC)Reply

Hello, thank for you for your review! Let me know as well if there is anything I can do to help. Bronson Fotiadis1 (talk) 13:17, 4 December 2024 (UTC)Reply

Introduce Key West as an island near Florida and link it in the main text.
Link Florida Keys in the main text.
...native occupation... Native or human?
...Calusas, Matecumbes, Tequestas, and late Seminoles... Introduce them as Native American tribes and link them.
Delink "debates".
...the possible occupation by the Calusa may have existed as a confederation... I do not understand.
...island's period... Delete "island's".
...Key West's native groups adopted... Why not future in the past?
Introduce and link Ponce de Leon.
...Ponce de Leon and his Spanish fleet adopted the island's original name of Cayo Hueso (Spanish pronunciation: [ˈkaʝo ˈweso]). Dried bones were discovered along the islands... For those who do not speak Spanish the connection between the name and the bones is unclear. Rephrase the two sentences.
...were discovered along the island's beaches, believed... By whom?
... during Spanish colonization... Is this necessary?
With the onset of British control of Florida, Key West become mostly uninhabited, with neither the arriving British nor Spanish exercising de facto control. Is there a connection between depopulation and the change of de iure control?
...in the case of a war... With whom?
...smugglers and privateers often used the island... Delete "often".
...Raids by foreign natives... Foreign natives?
...on the island... Which? Borsoka (talk) 13:45, 4 December 2024 (UTC)Reply
...settlers in Havana continued to issue fishing licenses... Settlers?
...awarded for... Is "awarded" necessary?
After years of government lobbying for the establishment of military installations in Key West,... Is this necessary? If yes, could you add some context?
Introduce Simon Bernard.
Could you change the quote box? The present version makes a large lacuna in the text.
...over the island's surrounding slave trade... Surrounding?
... as United States property... Property? Was the island bought from Perry or nationalised?
Why is note 5 necessary?
The 1840s saw three damaging hurricanes hit Key West. Simplify.
...to date... Delete.
...Florida's succession... Succession?
A link to Civil War?
...sent a message to Washington... I would say to the "central government" in Washington.
...was considered the 8th wonder of the world... By whom?
...Regarded as the most intense hurricanes to make landfall in the United States,... Why the plural? If it was the most intense hurricane, the text should state this.
Post-humorous?
...an almost doubling population soon came with arrival soldiers, sailors, laborers, and tourists. Rephrase.
Did Hemmingway return in 1903?
The fourth paragraph of section "20th century" is a little bit incoherent, mixing info about Hemmingway and WWII. Could you restructure it? Perhaps info about Hemmingway could be moved to the previous section.
A large majority of.... Delete.
...Submarine Squadron 4 was transferred its operations from Pearl Harbor to Key West... I do not understand.
..., respectively Is this necessary?
... while staying at the Harry S. Truman Little White House Delete.
I would delete note 6.
As a reputable source of tourism revenues, the roadblock and inspection station were removed soon afterwards. Fix the problem indicated by the tag and add a source to verify the statement.
The first paragraph of section "21th century" contains information from the previous century.
The last two sentences of the first paragraph of section "21th century" are not verified.
The island's first surge occurred at 2:30 am and reached heights of 5–6 ft (1.5–1.8 m) above mean sea level (MSL). Delete or move to a footnote.
The last two sentences of the last paragraph of section "21th century" are not verified.
...using small enclosures used as traps... Rephrase to avoid repetition.
...situated near Key West's harbors where they could be quickly processed in nearby canning buildings Delete.
...Soup canning, made often from the green pigment of the turtle shells,... I do not understand. What was made of the pigment?
...were often employed... By whom?
...on 6 September... Year?
...occurred for a duration of eight years... Rephrase.
As a result of the newly formed industry,... Some context? No industry was mentioned in the previous sentences.
...the discovery of large sponge beds in the shallow waters of Key West's reefs... When?
...the production of roughly 2,000 tons of sponge products a year When?
Section "Industry" contains information already mentioned in previous sections. Avoid the repetition of the same information in the main text. Borsoka (talk) 03:01, 7 December 2024 (UTC)Reply

Image review

File:Fort Zachary Taylor by Seth Eastman (1808 - 1875).png: a US PD tag is needed.
File:1591 De Bry and Le Moyne Map of Florida and Cuba - Geographicus - Florida-debry-1591 part.jpg: a US PD tag is needed.
File:Ernest and Pauline Hemingway, Key West, c1930s.jpg: could a link to the source be added? Borsoka (talk) 03:27, 7 December 2024 (UTC)Reply

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