User talk:Ijwilliams/Medical racism

Peer Review Comments

Hi Iasha,
You did a fantastic job creating this article on Medical racism and considering particularly salient examples to support your points. For one, I really liked your organization in this article: clear, logical, and easy-to-follow. I also commend your ability to sum up key points and succinctly communicate the message in the lead section!
You might consider any of these three ideas to augment your (already well-done) writing:
1. Consider what information you want to communicate in each section. For instance, do content from the Black Americans and History sections overlap? If so, how can you shape each section to serve a unique purpose?
2. Could you possibly provide any more examples? Or draw out commonalities from the examples you already presented? Examples are good but stating (with citation) that every example contains the following characteristics is even better.
3. Your writing in the above sections was superb. If you have a chance, it'd be great to see more on contemporary issues and alleviation!
Overall, a terrific job and I hope these suggestions can expand the impact you have. Cheers! Rshrid (talk) 02:36, 3 November 2021 (UTC)