Btaylor1836
Film History Peer Review
editHey Btaylor. I'm a fellow student in Shabazz's class.
First off, I wanted to compliment you on having the most well-rounded wiki article I've come across in our class so far. The content is lovely and you're really starting to curate the page so that it looks like a real wiki article. Congrats!
A couple of points:
- I don't know if you realize, but you're entire first paragraph is in italics. Shoud be an easy fix.
- The General Film company has a wiki page you can link to. Found it here: https://en.wiki.x.io/wiki/General_Film_Company
- Check your editing in your summary paragraph. It seems like it was a copy-paste job from Word that might not have translated.
- Your notes section could be names something else, like 'themes'. Although the statements are factual, they are still pretty ambiguous and could be labeled as a single interpretation.
- Get some pictures! Spice this up! If you can't find any previously used photos in the Wiki database, use the uploader in the Wiki Commons here: https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Main_Page
I'll stay posted to see if you've done any more significant edits before tomorrow. Hope Thanksgiving was awesome!
Welcome!
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A Natural Born Gambler
editHi, Btaylor1836. I've left some comments on your draft here. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:44, 20 November 2014 (UTC)
Moving your article
editHi Btaylor1836.
If you want to move the content from your draft to the current article you can do so by opening up an edit window on your draft and copying out the wikitext (not the result, so you maintain formatting like '''this is bolded''' and references. Then you paste the content into the edit window for A Natural Born Gambler. I assume you won't want to replace everything (for instance the image used in the infobox on the current article could still be used after your changes, but maybe elsewhere in the article) and you will want to keep the categories as they are now (at the bottom of the page), but that's basically it. When you're done, leave an edit summary noting that you've added content from your draft and hit save (after previewing, of course!).
I think you can improve the draft you have now every easily (and without writing much or any new content) by splitting some of what you have in the introduction into other sections. For an article like this, you'll generally want a shorter introduction section and I think you can move some of the stuff you have in the intro now in another section. You could create a section just titled "Bert Williams" and move the stuff about how williams's reputation helped the movie get made into there.
However that's not required and I think what you've already written is an improvement over the current article.
If you're having trouble moving the content or editing the intro section please let me know. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:54, 5 December 2014 (UTC)
Nice article!
editHi, I'm Eryk from the Wiki Education Foundation. I happened to notice the really great work you did on the Natural Born Gambler article! In particular, the fact that you found and uploaded that advertisement is really nice. I wondered if you'd be interested in sharing some of your experiences working on this site for our blog? We could use your real name or your Wikipedia username. We find students like to participate since it gives them a pretty positive search result related to the field they're studying in. If you have a minute, you can drop me an e-mail at eryk@wikiedu.org, mention your username and what course you were in, and answer any of the following questions, and I'd be excited to get some attention directed toward your good work.
- Did you have any experience with Wikipedia before the class started? What did you think of Wikipedia before you started work on this assignment?
- How did you find the process of writing a Wikipedia article, compared to if you had written a traditional paper on the topic?
- At what point did you find that ad? Did you know you were going to work on the article already? Where was the ad? What was the process like for you to get it to Wikipedia -- ie, did you have to scan it at your library or did you find a digital copy? (It's a really clean scan, btw!)
- What are your goals (career or academics wise?)
Thanks so much for your time!