Template:Did you know nominations/Nakamura Satoru

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The result was: rejected by BlueMoonset (talk) 06:53, 7 March 2014 (UTC)
Withdrawn by nominator.

Nakamura Satoru

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A man in military uniform with medals

Created by MChew (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 12:37, 23 February 2014 (UTC).

  • Created on 22-Feb - new enough
2829 characters of prose - long enough
seems neutral
some chunks of text lack inline citations
Dupuy quoted as a reference but not used in inline citations
offline sources are unverifiable - AGF
hook - short enough, interesting & neutral
QPQ not required
image - PD, used in article, shows up well in small
Just some citations to sort out... --Gibmetal 77talk 2 me 00:02, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
Ah yes. I asked the article creator if the book reference references all the text above it. I am still waiting for a reply. Thanks, Matty.007 17:07, 26 February 2014 (UTC)
Perhaps I'm missing something obvious, but I do not find this hook interesting. It is not at all surprising to me that a Japanese man in an old-looking military uniform might have been the son of a samurai -- and without the image there would nothing here of interest at all. The hook gives me no reason to want to read about this man. Is there something interesting about the son of a samurai becoming an officer in the early Imperial Japanese Army? Perhaps a different hook could be written about his military experience, for example:
I guess 'interestingness' is subjective... I think samurais are super cool and will always attract my attention. The original hook leaves me wanting to know more and I'd probably be more likely to click on the article than with ALT1. But that's just me --Gibmetal 77talk 2 me 00:05, 27 February 2014 (UTC)
  • Repeating the most severe of the icons used in the above review, since the software assumes the final icon is the one that holds. Gibmetal, for future reference, it's best only to use a single icon in your review—using many makes it hard for promoters to figure out what's up—but if you do use many, please also use a summary icon at the end that shows the overall status. Many thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 14:39, 27 February 2014 (UTC)
  • I think we have established that the creator won't respond; I've had a bit of a look for sources, but being GB Google, nothing doing. Unless there is a development I don't know about, I think this should be withdrawn. Thanks, Matty.007 17:56, 6 March 2014 (UTC)