Template:Did you know nominations/Mangrove restaurant

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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk)

Mangrove restaurant

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Created by SlimVirgin (talk). Nominated by Jayen466 (talk) at 02:27, 15 August 2011 (UTC)

  • Hook: Interesting enough, not too long. Cited.
Article: Long enough, new enough. No images. Article seems to be a fork of the Frank Crichlow article, with numerous pieces of biographical info on him there. Paraphrasing seems okay.
Summary: Could you clean this up so it focuses only on the restaurant? Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:57, 18 August 2011 (UTC)
Thanks for the review. I take your point and have made some edits; does it look now? --JN466 16:22, 18 August 2011 (UTC)
Still fairly heavy on the founder's biographic details. Crisco 1492 (talk) 16:45, 18 August 2011 (UTC)
I wouldn't know what part to remove now, as what is left is related to the raids on the restaurant. The "local joke", perhaps, although that relates to the raid as well – the primary notability of the restaurant is because of the raids, and the resulting court cases. What would you suggest? Alternatively, I can see if I can find more info on the restaurant per se. --JN466 17:03, 18 August 2011 (UTC)
Actually, looking at it again, I have transferred the "local joke" to Crichlow's biography, as it was not present in that article and arguably fits better there. I've also replaced the characterisation of Crichlow as the "godfather of black radicalism", which is contained in his biography, so as to avoid duplication. --JN466 17:30, 18 August 2011 (UTC)
  • Seems better, but still rather forky. Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:30, 18 August 2011 (UTC)