Template:Did you know nominations/Keanolani

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The result was: promoted by Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:47, 27 August 2018 (UTC)

Keanolani

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King Kamehameha V in 1850
King Kamehameha V in 1850
  • ...that Keanolani was the illegitimate daughter of King Kamehameha V (pictured), who died in 1872 without naming an heir to the throne?
    • ALT1:...that Keanolani was born from the illegitimate union of two Hawaiian royal students at the Royal School?

Created by KAVEBEAR (talk). Self-nominated at 06:15, 16 July 2018 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems

Hook eligibility:

  • Cited: Yes
  • Interesting: Yes
  • Other problems: Yes
Image: Image is freely licensed, used in the article, and clear at 100px.
QPQ: Done.

Overall: The article needs a good copyedit as some of the language is not quite standard English. The issue with the hook (mentioned above) needs to be addressed, too. Looks good. ···日本穣 · 投稿 · Talk to Nihonjoe · Join WP Japan! 18:17, 7 August 2018 (UTC)

  • Possibly is used because paternal identification is not 100% as specified in the article. Copyedit will have to wait unless you can point out the problematic sections you see. Most of it is long sentences but grammatically correct long sentences. KAVEBEAR (talk) 21:36, 7 August 2018 (UTC)
  • In the second sentence of the lead in the article, it states, "She was the illegitimate daughter of Abigail Maheha and King Kamehameha V...", yet the hook here states "possibly". EIther the lead needs changing or the hook needs changing. They can't both be correct.
  • As for the copyedits, perhaps someone from WP:GOCE would be willing to give it a once over. There are instances of missing words, incorrect pluralization, and so on. Since you wrote it, you may not notice them because your brain knows what it should say. ···日本穣 · 投稿 · Talk to Nihonjoe · Join WP Japan! 22:56, 7 August 2018 (UTC)
  • @Nihonjoe: Copyedit done. Removed problem in hook as well.KAVEBEAR (talk) 02:15, 10 August 2018 (UTC)
  • @KAVEBEAR: Sorry, I didn't see the ping because you added it after you signed your comment (see here). The template only pings if added at the same time as a signature. Everything looks good. ···日本穣 · 投稿 · Talk to Nihonjoe · Join WP Japan! 17:36, 26 August 2018 (UTC)