Template:Did you know nominations/Jorden van Foreest

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:42, 7 October 2017 (UTC)

Jorden van Foreest

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Created by Hrodvarsson (talk). Self-nominated at 02:40, 25 September 2017 (UTC).

  • Article is new, a good length, well-sourced, and I like the hook. I also think the hook could be tightened up. I'd remove the Wikilinks around "Dutch Chess Champion" since that's in the lede of the article and work on wording something a little catchier than "...who himself was..."
Not sure what that is yet. If I sleep on it something may come to me. Morganfitzp (talk) 07:58, 27 September 2017 (UTC)
Thanks for response. @Morganfitzp: How about these:
ALT1: ... that Dutch Chess Champion Jorden van Foreest is the great-great grandson of Arnold van Foreest, a three-time Dutch Chess Champion?
ALT2: ... that Dutch Chess Champion Jorden van Foreest is the great-great grandson of fellow Dutch Chess Champion Arnold van Foreest?
Hrodvarsson (talk) 22:09, 27 September 2017 (UTC)
  • All these are fine. I'll let the closing editor pick their favorite. Morganfitzp (talk) 02:59, 28 September 2017 (UTC)