- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Alex ShihTalk 15:14, 16 August 2013 (UTC)
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Holly Campbell
edit- ... that Holly Campbell grew up in a mining town on Michigan's Keweenaw Peninsula and became the 1930 NCAA Championship in the hammer throw?
- Reviewed: Jimmy Lavender
Created by Cbl62 (talk). Self nominated at 17:44, 13 August 2013 (UTC).
Article length, date, and compliance with policy have been verified. However, the article does not technically say he grew up in a mining town and in any case I fail to see how that makes the hook more interesting. I would suggest the "less is more" hook:
- ALT1: ... that Holly Campbell won the 1930 NCAA Championship in the hammer throw?
- --ThaddeusB (talk) 03:47, 14 August 2013 (UTC)
- How about: alt 2 ... that Holly Campbell, a native of Michigan's Keweenaw Peninsula, won the 1930 NCAA Championship in the hammer throw? Cbl62 (talk) 19:23, 14 August 2013 (UTC)
Like I said, I don't think his place of birth adds anything to the hook, but that is a preference not a requirement. Fact is verifiable, so we are good to go.
