Template:Did you know nominations/Hameen Ali

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:19, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

Hameen Ali

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• ... that Hameen Ali received the Disney Sports Spirit Award, awarded annually to "college football's most inspirational athlete, who displays a sense of courage and an undying love for the game, while overcoming adversity on or off the field?"

• Reviewed: Adama Ndiaye

Created/expanded by Jrcla2 (talk). Self nom at 14:27, 29 June 2012 (UTC)

Hook is too long (well over 200 characters - and remember spaces must be counted). Otherwise good to go: New enough, long enough, within policy, and hook is verifiable. I think you can fix this easily by shortening the hook. -- Presearch (talk) 10:55, 30 June 2012 (UTC)

One possible alternative hook might be ALT 1: ... that Hameen Ali received the Disney Sports Spirit Award, awarded annually to "college football's most inspirational athlete... while overcoming adversity"?

--Presearch (talk) 11:01, 30 June 2012 (UTC)

I'm good with Alt1. Jrcla2 (talk) 16:31, 30 June 2012 (UTC)

ALT1 is problematic in terms of being a smooth sentence. I suggest drastically shortening the quote and doing some rearrangement:

• ALT2: ... that Hameen Ali received the Disney Sports Spirit Award, awarded annually to the "most inspirational" college football player who overcomes adversity? —BlueMoonset (talk) 05:09, 13 July 2012 (UTC)

Good to go with ALT2. Aymatth2 (talk) 15:44, 13 July 2012 (UTC)