Template:Did you know nominations/Elizabeth Edmondson

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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:29, 29 September 2011 (UTC)

Elizabeth Edmondson

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Three-year-old Elizabeth Edmondson learning to walk

  • ... that Elizabeth Edmondson (pictured at age three) broke a world record at the age of fourteen while casually having a swim?

Created/expanded by LauraHale (talk). Nominated by Hawkeye7 (talk) at 08:18, 19 September 2011 (UTC)

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  • The only problem I see is that the sources don't say that she was having a casual swim - it sounds like she was doing training. Is there another way of wording that, perhaps just "doing a training swim"? Mikenorton (talk) 22:00, 27 September 2011 (UTC)
  • Furthermore, it's not entirely clear that she broke a world record -- the source merely says her coach told her she broke a world record. It's probably true, though, as she broke several world records in competitions that same year. Here's a possible rewording:
  • ALT1 ... that, at the age of fourteen, Elizabeth Edmondson (pictured at age three) was told that she had broken a world record while swimming in the park? --Orlady (talk) 02:44, 28 September 2011 (UTC)
  • That sound better and I've linked 'park' to Beatty Park to make it clear she wasn't just swimming in the park, so
Now ready with ALT1. Mikenorton (talk) 21:01, 28 September 2011 (UTC)