Talk:Steel Gunner

Latest comment: 4 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:37, 8 March 2020 (UTC)Reply

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 09:37, 8 March 2020 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lead

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  • "Players take control of Garcia and Cliff, police officers" - the text in bold should be worded as either two police officers or a duo of police officers
  • "avoid inflicting damage on civilians" - better; harming
  • Wikilink arcade cabinet

Gameplay

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  • "The plot the police officers Garcia and Cliff," - a word is missing from this section of text
  • "members of the Neo Arc police force" - more complete; who are members
  • Wikilink health meter to Health (game terminology) and boss fight to Boss (video games) and levels to Level (video games)
  • "The loss of all health results in game over." - in a game over.
  • "If players' shooting accuracy was poor," - more complete and formal; If the players' shooting accuracy was low,

Development and release

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  • "described as the company's" - state whom is describing as whom to avoid MOS:WEASEL

Reception

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  • You can mention the names of the reviewers opposite the magazines if you feel it would be beneficial to the article
  • "with several complimenting its responsive controls and its well-designed levels." - the second mention of the word "its" should be removed
  • "Some have also drawn comparisons" - some reviewers or some magazines
  • "and the tenth most-successful." - based on the Electronic Games source, the text here would be better off worded as tenth most-successful overall of that month.
  • "and Taito's Operation Wolf (1987).[9][1]" - refs should be in numerical order

Sequel

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  • "was released a year later in Japan in March 1992 and in North America in April 1992." - the following month.}

Notes

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  • "leading some publications to incorrectly place its release in that year.[6][1]" - refs should be in numerical order

References

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  • References 4, 5 and 8 should mention the sources are written in Japanese

Overall the main issues are focused in the prose and the lack of some wikilinks that would aid the average reader. On hold for the time being. MWright96 (talk) 10:42, 8 March 2020 (UTC)Reply

MWright96 - Issues have been addressed. Namcokid47 (Contribs) 16:42, 8 March 2020 (UTC)Reply