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Questions about Masters degree in relation to Army and FBI
editPeter’s resume doesn’t make sense. How could he receive his Masters , then Army, then FBI in that short of time? Also, where is his CIA employment? 24.107.155.225 (talk) 04:21, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
- Undergrad program 1987-1991, Army 1991-1996, FBI 1996-2018. A Masters is not a full-day commitment like a job, you work on it over time, and he completed his in 2013 while an FBI agent. Strzok was never in the CIA, that is a QAnon-fueled fantasy. ValarianB (talk) 12:02, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
Deletion of material from lead without any explanation or discussion
editThis edit deletes well-sourced accurate information from the lead, with the following edit summary: "BLP violation mischaracterizing source". No hint is given by User:SPECIFICO what the mischaracterization is, or what part of WP:BLP is violated. The deleted material in the lead is indicated by strikethrough:
“ | A comprehensive review in February 2018 of Strzok's messages by The Wall Street Journal concluded that "texts critical of Mr. Trump represent a fraction of the roughly 7,000 messages, which stretch across 384 pages and show no evidence of a conspiracy against Mr. Trump".[1] References
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I will restore this material if no explanation is provided. Anythingyouwant (talk) 03:33, 6 November 2022 (UTC)
- No, actually you'll need consensus. It's pillow talk. SPECIFICO talk 03:46, 6 November 2022 (UTC)
- If you are withdrawing your assertion of a BLP violation, please say so. Otherwise, I'll take this straight to WP:BLPN (I will probably go there anyway). Your assertion that Strzok was merely engaging in untruthful and insincere "pillowtalk" is interesting, but the cited New York Times article indicates otherwise. Moreover, you're wildly off base if you think the DOJ inspector general was engaging in pillow talk when he released the additional text messages. If all of these text messages were pillow talk, then we should not be mentioning any texts in the lead at all, but you seem to only like to call texts "pillowtalk" when they reflect poorly upon Mr. Strzok, User:SPECIFICO. You are engaged in "excluding sources that do not conform to the editor's point of view" which is explicitly forbidden by WP:NPOV. Anythingyouwant (talk) 04:10, 6 November 2022 (UTC)
- I have rephrased and reinserted the material. This addresses your concerns and mine too. Also, the lead no longer gives the FALSE and DISHONEST impression that Strzok was fired from the FBI for text messages that the Wall Street Journal had found unproblematic. Anythingyouwant (talk) 04:49, 6 November 2022 (UTC)
- If you are withdrawing your assertion of a BLP violation, please say so. Otherwise, I'll take this straight to WP:BLPN (I will probably go there anyway). Your assertion that Strzok was merely engaging in untruthful and insincere "pillowtalk" is interesting, but the cited New York Times article indicates otherwise. Moreover, you're wildly off base if you think the DOJ inspector general was engaging in pillow talk when he released the additional text messages. If all of these text messages were pillow talk, then we should not be mentioning any texts in the lead at all, but you seem to only like to call texts "pillowtalk" when they reflect poorly upon Mr. Strzok, User:SPECIFICO. You are engaged in "excluding sources that do not conform to the editor's point of view" which is explicitly forbidden by WP:NPOV. Anythingyouwant (talk) 04:10, 6 November 2022 (UTC)
I’ve started a BLPN discussion here. Anythingyouwant (talk) 15:22, 6 November 2022 (UTC)
“In spite of” in the lead
editThe lead says, “On August 10, 2018, FBI deputy director David Bowdich fired Strzok for the text messages in spite of the fact that the FBI's employee disciplinary office had recommended that Strzok only be suspended for 60 days and demoted.” I suggest that a more neutral and concise phrasing would replace “in spite of the fact that” with “after”.
Per MOS:EDITORIAL, “When used to link two statements, words such as but, despite, however, and although may imply a relationship where none exists, possibly unduly calling the validity of the first statement into question while giving undue weight to the credibility of the second.” Indeed, the current language in the lead calls into question the firing while giving undue weight to the disciplinary action.
It’s true that the cited WaPo article uses language similar to “in spite of” (i.e. “even though”) but that was in course of describing what Strzok’s attorney had said, rather than in WaPo-voice:
Aitan Goelman, Strzok’s attorney, said FBI Deputy Director David L. Bowdich ordered the firing Friday, even though the director of the FBI office that usually handles employee discipline had decided that Strzok, 48, should face only a demotion and a 60-day suspension.
Anythingyouwant (talk) 10:35, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
- Your proposal sounds reasonable. I quickly reviewed ten reliable sources (not cited in our article, AFAIK) that mentioned "60-day suspension" and all except one specifically attributed the statement to Strzok's attorney. Politrukki (talk) 16:15, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
- Good catch. There is no doubt the attorney was right, but the improved wording is better. -- Valjean (talk) (PING me) 16:51, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
Done, thanks. Anythingyouwant (talk) 16:55, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
- That last change doesn't completely catch the situation. Sometimes a "but" or "even though" is most accurate. Mentioning the lawyer's statement serves the purpose of alerting the reader to the unusual context. It is now without context and reads as if a road is smooth, without warning the reader that there is actually a huge bump they should have noticed. Without mentioning the lawyer, the original was better. Keep in mind that MOS:EDITORIAL and WP:WTW are only guidelines that can and should be ignored at times. -- Valjean (talk) (PING me) 17:17, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
- The lead currently says, “On August 10, 2018, FBI deputy director David Bowdich fired Strzok for the text messages after the FBI's employee disciplinary office had recommended that Strzok only be suspended for 60 days and demoted.” This seems simple and accurate, no? Anythingyouwant (talk) 18:46, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
- Correct. Politrukki (talk) 19:04, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
- The lead currently says, “On August 10, 2018, FBI deputy director David Bowdich fired Strzok for the text messages after the FBI's employee disciplinary office had recommended that Strzok only be suspended for 60 days and demoted.” This seems simple and accurate, no? Anythingyouwant (talk) 18:46, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
Yes, technically correct, but missing vital context and thus somewhat misleading. The sources provide us vital information we are withholding by not giving it more weight with the language we are suppressing. That's not right. We must convey that information. The attribution is a good thing, but not sufficient to do that. It works in the body, but the lead also needs it.
I have underlined key text differences below:
- Original lead: "On August 10, 2018, FBI deputy director David Bowdich fired Strzok for the text messages in spite of the fact that the FBI's employee disciplinary office had recommended that Strzok only be suspended for 60 days and demoted."
- Current lead: "On August 10, 2018, FBI deputy director David Bowdich fired Strzok for the text messages after the FBI's employee disciplinary office had recommended that Strzok only be suspended for 60 days and demoted."
- Suggested: "On August 10, 2018, FBI deputy director David Bowdich fired Strzok for the text messages in spite of the fact that, according to his lawyer, the FBI's employee disciplinary office had recommended that Strzok only be suspended for 60 days and demoted."
Yes, I have IAR as guidelines are not policies/rules, just recommendations that we all know should be ignored at times. This is such a time. By including attribution in the lead, we make it clear that the lawyer is trying to make the "in spite of" point, a point we have to make for them. -- Valjean (talk) (PING me) 19:46, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
- Alternatively, how about if we simply add a footnote in the article body? According to the LA Times, “Peter Strzok, the FBI agent whose anti-Trump text messages to a colleague during the 2016 campaign have been cited by the president as evidence of bias within the agency, has been fired….Strzok had initially been demoted and given a 60-day suspension after the bureau’s traditional independent review.” The lead already tracks that pretty well. I’ve just inserted the footnote. Anythingyouwant (talk) 20:25, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
- My suggestion, to be a little more clear about what is being attributed and to whom:
- "On August 10, 2018, FBI deputy director David Bowdich fired Strzok because of the text messages. Strzok's lawyer said the dismissal happened despite a recommendation by the FBI's employee disciplinary office for only a 60 day suspension and demotion."
- DonFB (talk) 20:54, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
- The LA Times does not rely upon the lawyer for the fact that Strzok was first given a lesser penalty by the office of professional responsibility before being fired. Adding the lawyer’s opinion into the lead is therefore unnecessary, doesn’t add much, and is kind of one-sided, because the lawyer would be expected to side with the lesser penalty whereas the FBI lawyers would be expected to take the other side. Anythingyouwant (talk) 21:12, 24 January 2023 (UTC)
- My suggestion, to be a little more clear about what is being attributed and to whom:
IP’s proposal to merge book article into this article
editA merge was proposed here by Special:Contributions/107.127.46.30. No reason was given by that IP. The article Compromised (book) is quite long, which seems like a good reason to keep it separate for now. Another reason is that that article has problems that ought to be resolved, per the tags at the top, and those problems look like they are serious. Anythingyouwant (talk) 18:13, 7 April 2023 (UTC)
- As a merge proposal has been suggested, but no discussion at the book article's talk page (as there should be), I'm pinging the article's creator. User:Dcw2003.
- I would oppose a merge as books normally have their own articles. -- Valjean (talk) (PING me) 18:56, 7 April 2023 (UTC)
- Per WP:Merging, standard practice is to discuss the proposed merge at the destination page, which is here rather than there. I am leaning against the merge at this time. Anythingyouwant (talk) 19:22, 7 April 2023 (UTC)
- Oppose merge, no good reason for it. The book meets WP:NBOOK. Schazjmd (talk) 22:18, 8 April 2023 (UTC)
Length of lead
editWP:LEADLENGTH suggests that when an article has 15,000 to 30,000 characters then two or three paragraphs are okay for the lead. So I will cut back the lead to three paragraphs & remove the tag. Anythingyouwant (talk) 17:47, 12 April 2023 (UTC)
- Please propose any chanages here on talk. Wholesale changes are likely to be reverted for discussion, and it's an unnecessary step. SPECIFICO talk 18:55, 12 April 2023 (UTC)
- I don’t expect any response here at the talk page, so why should I bother making a proposal here? For example, restoration of the merge tag hasn’t been explained here even though someone removed it at the other article. Nor has any alternative way of shortening the lead been suggested here, so that tag can be removed, User:SPECIFICO. Nor has any explanation been given for reverting this edit which inserted a date into a footnote. When edits are reverted for no reason, with no explanation, it’s hard to see what point is served by making formal proposals at the talk page. Anythingyouwant (talk) 19:33, 12 April 2023 (UTC)
- When none of the millions of Wikipedia editors respond to your recommendations, it's safe to assume they do not have consensus. SPECIFICO talk 20:30, 12 April 2023 (UTC)
- Please read Wikipedia:Don't revert due solely to "no consensus". You need a substantive reason, you need to explain your reasoning. Anythingyouwant (talk) 20:44, 12 April 2023 (UTC)
- When none of the millions of Wikipedia editors respond to your recommendations, it's safe to assume they do not have consensus. SPECIFICO talk 20:30, 12 April 2023 (UTC)
- I don’t expect any response here at the talk page, so why should I bother making a proposal here? For example, restoration of the merge tag hasn’t been explained here even though someone removed it at the other article. Nor has any alternative way of shortening the lead been suggested here, so that tag can be removed, User:SPECIFICO. Nor has any explanation been given for reverting this edit which inserted a date into a footnote. When edits are reverted for no reason, with no explanation, it’s hard to see what point is served by making formal proposals at the talk page. Anythingyouwant (talk) 19:33, 12 April 2023 (UTC)
- Since the lead is three paragraphs, I've removed the "lead too long" tag. – Muboshgu (talk) 19:23, 26 November 2023 (UTC)
Strzok
editThis aged well, no mention of Durham investigation that outed both him and his GF. Come on man 2600:8807:328B:E900:7DD3:61BF:3335:8C56 (talk) 18:42, 26 June 2023 (UTC)
- "Outed" him as what? If you want to propose a change, be specific and back them up with reliable sources. – Muboshgu (talk) 18:48, 26 June 2023 (UTC)