Talk:Colton Parayko

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Colton Parayko/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 20:38, 11 October 2020 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

• It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
• It contains copyright infringements -
• It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
• It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -

Prose

Lede

• WP:SHORT DESCRIPTION? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Can we condense this? This lede is four small paragraphs, could easily be two. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• reword to avoid WP:SEAOFBLUE. ice hockey defenceman Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
• Can we reword "underlooked"? There's two different meanings to this word, and neither fit here. Overlooked would be better. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Whats with the jump from being drafted to the blues, and then playing with Alaska Nanooks? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  • Lee Vilenski, unsure what you mean here. After being drafted he joined collegiate hockey immediately (similar to players like Quinn Hughes). HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:56, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
• All-WCHA First Team - SEAOFBLUE Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• also, WCHA needs to be stated in full. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• The lede seems to have very little on his NHL career, which is the most important part. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
• Parayko won the Stanley Cup as a member of the Blues in 2019. - this is a significantly bigger deal than what is being said here. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
• Internationally, Parayko has competed for Team Canada - the Canadian team. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:56, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  • I can change it but it is known as Team Canada (see the lede of Canada men's national ice hockey team)

General

• Link motorcross. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Midget AAA - what is this? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• St. Albert Crusaders U18 AA of the Rural & Edmonton Midget 15AA Hockey League - this seems a bit confusing to me. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  • The Rural & Edmonton Midget 15AA Hockey League is the league they played in but I have removed it.
• Is there a link for points, isn't it goals in hockey? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done Goals are a type of point but not all points are goals. I have WL Point (ice hockey)
• try-outs not try out. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• link defenceman Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Link what a "shift" is. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• The bit about him getting scouted could probably be the second para here. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• After the Oil Barons fell to the - the "X fell to Y" isn't fantastic writing, can we say "defeated", or "beat"? The term fell usually refers to soldiers dying in battle. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• NCAA Men's Division I Western Collegiate Hockey Association - reword for links next to each other. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
• Air Force Falcons men's ice hockey team - probably on links like this, just need to say the Air Force Falcons. The rest is kinda implied. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  •  Done
• Parayko's outstanding play - is this a quote? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
• Award,[17] - punct. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
• During the first round, Parayko led the Blues over the Blackhawks by becoming the first defenseman in franchise history to score in a Game 7 - is this really all that notable? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  • It was their very first Stanley Cup so he was the very first player in 50 years to ever score in Game 7.
• Where is "Regular season and playoffs" sourced? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:14, 13 October 2020 (UTC)
  • At the very bottom of the article it says Biographical information and career statistics from NHL.com, or Eliteprospects.com, or Eurohockey.com, or Hockey-Reference.com, or The Internet Hockey Database

GA Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Review meta comments

• I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:38, 11 October 2020 (UTC)