Talk:American Samoa at the 2008 Summer Olympics

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:American Samoa at the 2008 Summer Olympics/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Dom497 (talk · contribs) 18:32, 6 July 2012 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   See comment section below.

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

   See comment section below.

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   Pass!--Dom497 (talk) 12:19, 8 July 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• When I read through the article, a lot of words kept getting repeated. In my opinion, when words get repeated over and over and over, the paragraph doesn't sound right. What I am talking about is: American Samoa is used a lot in the lead and background sections, and in each of the sections talking about the sport the athlete participated in use their full name, not just their last. their last names are repeated to many times.

I varied the wording accordingly. I, however, did not fully understand what you were trying to say with regards to using their names. Can you clarify that part? --Starstriker7^(Talk) 16:59, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

Guam-born then 24 year-old judoka Silulu A`etonu was the only American Samoan participating in a judo event at the Beijing Olympics. A'etonu had not previously participated in any Olympic games.[5] A`etonu represented American Samoa in the women's half-middleweight weight class (which includes competitors under 63 kilograms in weight). During the August 12 Round of 32 (the first round), A`etonu faced Germany's Ana Victoria Luise von Harnier.[6] von Harnier defeated A`etonu by a kuchiki taoshi, scoring ippon. A`etonu did not advance to later rounds.[5].

This paragraph (as an example) has their last name repeated 6 times in a very short paragraph. You should take some of them out and replace them with her or she. And never mind about the comment about using their full name.--Dom497 (talk) 19:34, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

Ah, I see. Thanks for the clarification. In any case, we should be all set. --Starstriker7^(Talk) 20:43, 7 July 2012 (UTC)

This is the one issue I have with the article so if you have any questions please post them here or on my talk page.--Dom497 (talk) 21:38, 6 July 2012 (UTC)

I have passed the article.--Dom497 (talk) 12:19, 8 July 2012 (UTC)