Talk:Amee Kamani/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 10:46, 27 August 2021 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Prose

Lede

• Lede is a little short. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:56, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• No need to link Indian Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:56, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• ACBS isn't used again in lede Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:56, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• Infobox only has two parameters, could we fill it a bit? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:56, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• Things like the score at the world snooker championship and stuff would be nice. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:56, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• English Billiards -> English billiards Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:56, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

General

• En-dash required for scores Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:06, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• However, she lost interest in table tennis - probably don't need to say table tennis again. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:06, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• links for cue sports and snooker would be suitable in body. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:06, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• It's six-red, not 6-red. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:06, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• What is DNA? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:06, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• Need to expand abbreviations on first use. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:06, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• Nine-ball pool matches - a few times this happens, but no need for the capital letter. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:06, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• IBSF 6 reds - it's six-reds. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:06, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
• A couple of the career finals don't have any info. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 20:06, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Review meta comments

• I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:46, 27 August 2021 (UTC)

• Thanks for picking up the review and for the constructive comments, Lee Vilenski. Hopefully I've addressed everything, but let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:36, 30 August 2021 (UTC)