Talk:Air Combat/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:45, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
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- "Air Combat[a] is..." never keen on such an intrusive footnote, could you say "Air Combat (also known as Ace Combat in Japan)[A]..."?
- Per WP:VG/JP, the Japanese name should be kept as a footnote, unless it's written in kanji and therefore requires explanation (which this one doesn't).
- "in the country of Usea" -> "in the fictional country of Usea"
- Corrected
- "fightercraft"' say what? Do you mean an "aircraft" or a "fighter aircraft"" or a "fighter"?
- I've seen "fightercraft" be used before, but I changed it to "aircraft".
- "arcade hardware" no need for "arcade".
- Removed
- "shipped 2.23 million copies" worldwide I presume.
- Yeah, worldwide sales. Noted.
- Shouldn't the release date for mobile phone (2005) be reflected in the infobox?
- I've never really been a fan of listing multiple release dates for a game in a single infobox, since more often than not it gets cluttered. I chose to just keep the PlayStation version's release date since that is the original version of the game.
- No reason for "n.a." in fields in the fair use image licensing, that needs to be remedied.
- "the country of Usea" again, add "fictional".
- Done
- "and stealth aircraft" why not say which one?
- Removed pipelink
- "powered System 21 arcade" link System 21.
- Done
- Link "port".
- Done
- "allow ... allow" repetitive.
- Removed second instance
- "in Japan on June 30, 1995.[9] It was released " -> in Japan on June 30, 1995, and on September 9 in the United States as...
- I actually disagree with this idea. I've chosen to specify it was titled Ace Combat in Japan in the first sentence, and I think the second sentence leading into the American and European dates is fine.
- "on August 25, 2005 for" comma after 2005.
- Done
- "did Allgame's " AllGame.
- Done
- "console.[19][16]" order.
- Done
- "cutscenes,[19][16] realistic sound effects,[14][17][13][19] and amount" similar, twice.
- Done
- Ref 14 should have spaced en-dash, not spaced hyphen in the tite.
- Added
That's all I have. On hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:03, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- The Rambling Man: That should be it. Thanks for reviewing. Namcokid47 00:51, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- Namcokid47 the fair use rationale is still complete for the screenshot. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 07:51, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- The Rambling Man: Done. Namcokid47 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- Good stuff, promoting now. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 15:49, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- The Rambling Man: Done. Namcokid47 15:11, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- Namcokid47 the fair use rationale is still complete for the screenshot. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 07:51, 12 March 2021 (UTC)