Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Sihanouk Trail/archive1

Just finished rounding this article off. Looking for some criticism. RM Gillespie 03:25, 29 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Looks great to me. I fixed two minor spelling errors - there may be others. Vietnamization should perhaps be wikilinked the first time it appears, in "Operation Menu", rather than later. So, yeah, minor copyedit sort of stuff. But overall, it's very professionally written, very detailed and balanced, and seems as far as I can tell to touch all the important points. If there's anything to be fixed on the overall style, it's that it may be too professionally written - intimidating for the reader with those giant, dense paragraphs. Still, I gladly Support your bid for A status. LordAmeth 08:41, 29 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Support, although I don't know that "Road to the Abyss" is the best name for the last section (it seems a little dramatic, and this is an encyclopedia, after all). Carom 20:43, 29 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Support, but this chapter could be rewritten to make more sense.
Sihanouk, furious with the course of events, quickly assumed leadership, in absentia, of front made up of the North Vietnamese and Viet Cong, the Khmer Rouge, and the Laotian Pathet Lao, throwing his personal prestige in Cambodia behind the communists.[23] In the wake of the coup that toppled Sihanouk, the new Cambodian government turned over captured documents to the US disclosing the full extent of Sihanouk's participation in the infiltration effort. Between December 1966 and April 1969, Unit K-20 had facilitated the infiltration of 29,000 tons of cargo into Cambodia.[24] The unit had also purchased 55,000 tons of rice annually from the government and another 100,000 tons directly from Cambodian farmers.[25]
Wandalstouring 22:31, 30 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]
After rereading the passage, I agree that it was rather roudabout and confusing. Have corrected the problem. RM Gillespie 16:26, 1 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]