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SummerSlam (1988)

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want some really good comments on how to improve the article in an effort to get it to GA and maybe FA status. This is the first article of this nature that I have written, so I would like some comments from people who usually write PPVs to make sure I including everything. I would also like some comments from non-wrestling fans. Is the article well-written? Is it accessible to non-fans? Is everything adequately explained?

Thanks, Nikki311 23:03, 22 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]


Ruhrfisch comments: Here are some suggestions to help improve the article to GA status.

  • A model article is often useful for ideas and to follow (style, structure, etc.). I note that the 1993, 1994, and 2007 Summer Slams are all Good Articles and would make nice models.
  • The article is generally well written but has a few awkward sentences such as Because he no longer had a challenger for his title, The Honky Tonk Man claimed that he did not care who he opposed.[4] and could use a copyedit.
  • My understanding is that all WWF events are scripted, so the article might want to make this clearer. See WP:IN-U
  • Also be careful to avoid jargon and provide context for the reader - for example, although DDT is wikilinked, perhaps explaining it briefly in When Roberts attempted a DDT, Hercules was able to escape ... would make it clearer.
  • This sentence seems to missing a word The following [?] was a rematch between Dino Bravo, accompanied by Frenchy Martin, and Don Muraco of their WrestleMania IV matchup.[3] or perhaps The sixth event was a rematch...?
  • Is it wrestling style to abbreviate "with" as "w/"?
  • Since some wrestlers are seen as good or bad (crowd favorites or villains) should this information be given?
  • This could use some history of the development of Summer Slam. Since this was the very first Summer Slam, who came up with the idea? What were the ratings like? What was the critical reception if any (obviously a success, as it has been repeated since)?
  • Honestly, I don't think much has been written about the development of SummerSlam (at least not nearly as much as say [[WrestleMania or the Royal Rumble), but I'll do some more research to see what I can find. Nikki311 17:48, 2 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I hope this helps - sorry not to have more ideas, you might want to ask at WP:PRV for more reviewers, or at the WikiProject for Wrestling or maybe ask one of the authors of the other SummerSlam GAs. Ruhrfisch ><>°° 17:13, 26 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much! That was very helpful. I'll start working on your suggestions later today. Nikki311 18:14, 26 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from La Pianista (talk · contribs)

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  • In the sentence "He was originally supposed to defend his championship against Brutus Beefcake, but he was unable to compete because of an injury caused by Ron Bass before the event.", "because of" could be changed to "due to." My grammar teacher used to beef on me because of that.
  • "Honky Tonk Man ... did not care who" → "did not care whom", another thing I got beefed about.
  • "using steel chairs on one another..." This provoked laughter somehow...no offense. :-) Try elaborating on how they used the steel chairs. Banging? Breaking each other's necks?
  • I completely agree with Ruhrfisch on that last comment; although it's entertaining to watch the action through the text, some tidbits on the origin of the SummerSlam would help.

Otherwise...not too bad, although the wrestling antics are quite laughable. ;-) --LaPianísta! 22:33, 26 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments. I'll get right on these. Also, no offense taken. :) Nikki311 00:59, 27 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)
  • You need a specific fair use rationale for the image in the infobox.
  • Consistency in link "The" into team names is needed.
  • There's referencing then there's overreferencing - do you really need four citations for the single sentence "Hogan and Savage won the match after Miss Elizabeth, Savage's wife and manager, distracted the referee by removing her skirt to reveal her underwear."?
  • No need to continually use the same reference on consecutive sentences, e.g. you use ref [1] on 16 consecutive sentences. Just once at the end of each paragraph, or before another reference is relevant.
  • page numbers in references don't need to be in parentheses.

That's about it from me. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:32, 27 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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