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Raff & Gammon

I've listed this article for peer review because I wonder what other people will think about it. I am worried that there is something wrong with the article and I need someone to help me out. I also doing this to learn more about creating articles and how I can create a better one.

Sincerely, Analog Horror, (Speak) 03:26, 18 March 2020 (UTC)

Comments from Thatoneweirdwikier

Apologies for the long wait! Here are a few of my comments:

• Generally, it should be clear as to whether "Raff & Gammon" means "the company" or "the founders".
• "...who were really interested in it..." Remove the word "really".
• Personally, I think the section "Fall of the Kinetoscope Company" needs to be more neutral.

That's honestly it. I might take a look to see if there are any other sources that can help to expand the article. Thatoneweirdwikier | Say hi 10:45, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

Extra references

Below, I've listed some references that may help to expand the article:

• "Raff and Gammon". BFI. Retrieved 2020-05-14.
• "Guide to Motion Picture Catalogs - The Edison Papers". edison.rutgers.edu. Retrieved 2020-05-14.
• Musser, Charles (1994-05-04). The Emergence of Cinema: The American Screen to 1907. University of California Press. ISBN 978-0-520-08533-6.
• "Before the Nickelodeon". publishing.cdlib.org. Retrieved 2020-05-14.
• Balio, Tino (1985-03-04). The American Film Industry. Univ of Wisconsin Press. ISBN 978-0-299-09873-5.
• Musser, Charles; Nelson, Carol (2015-03-08). High-Class Moving Pictures: Lyman H. Howe and the Forgotten Era of Traveling Exhibition, 1880-1920. Princeton University Press. ISBN 978-1-4008-7272-5.

Hope this helps. Thatoneweirdwikier | Say hi 10:58, 14 May 2020 (UTC)