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I've listed this article for peer review because I think it can become FA.

Thanks, TGilmour (talk) 14:04, 17 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]


Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your work on this article, here are some suggestions for improvement with an eye to FAC.

I think there is only one issue regarding this article. It lacks the playing style section but don't forget that he is a defender not a forward so it may be slightly incongruous to have such section here.
  • There is a toolbox on this PR page which finds at least one disambiguation link that will need to be fixed before FAC
Done
  • It also finds about 19 dead external links - see here - these need to be fixed before FAC too
  • The billboard image File:Kaladzeboard.jpg is probably copyrighted by the firm that set up the billboard - not sure if there is freedom of panorama where it was taken (Georgia?) or not. If it is copyrighted, it probably cannot be used in the article even as FAIR USE per WP:NFCC
Done
Added
  • Avoid vague time terms like now, currently, today, etc. So in the first sentence in the lead I would either say that he plays as a defender for Italian Serie A club Genoa and captains the Georgia national team as of June 2011 OR something like "he has played as a defender for Italian Serie A club Genoa since August 2010 and captained the Georgia national team since YEAR.
Done, please check it now
  • The most difficult FA criterion for most articles to meet is 1z, a professional level of English. Just in the lead this could be tightened He was voted as Georgian Footballer of the Year in the years 2001–2003, and 2006.,[3] [and] Moreover, he is considered as one of Georgia's most important players.[4][5]
I corrected it but can you tell me why it was a mistake?
  • Avoid needless repetition - the first paragraph already said he was Georgian Footballer of the Year four times, so why does it need to be repeated in the second paragraph of the lead i.e. To date he has won the Georgian Footballer of the Year award four times...
  • Second paragraph also written as if he were still with Milan With Milan he has won the Champions League on two occasions... why not just With Milan he won the Champions League on two occasions...
  • What years did he play for his local club Lokomotiv Samtredia?
He did not play there.
  • Awkward until former Georgia international footballer David Kipiani requested Kakha to join Dinamo Tbilisi.[6] perhaps "requested that Kakha join Dinamo Tbilisi" Also was it really just a request or was it some sort of business transaction?
  • Early career mentions eight league titles in a row twice - are they the same? Does this need to be mentioned twice in the section.
  • In the Milan section an injury to Gerasimenko is mentioned as the reason for his leaving Kiev, but Gerasimenko has not been mentioned before.
  • How about "an injury to Paolo..." instead in In 2005–06, the injury of Paolo Maldini meant that Kaladze was moved back into the centre of defence, his favoured position.[15]
  • What are the refs for the stats after the table in Career statistics?
They are included: As of 22 May 2011.[1][81]
  • Seems comprehensive, refs also seem OK as far as I can tell. Biggest issue would be the prose which is rough in spots - try to get a copyedit.
  • Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 04:16, 4 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, I did some stuff and please re-check it. TGilmour (talk) 06:36, 4 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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