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The list was promoted by NapHit 17:30, 21 October 2012 [1].

Jessica Mauboy discography

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Nominator(s): — Oz (talk) 23:05, 6 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because after months of improving the article, I feel that it meets the FL criteria. — Oz (talk) 23:05, 6 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support w/comments below
    • In the lead, a comma should be between "Running Back" and "which featured American rapper Flo Rida."
    • Rearrange "Get 'Em Girls was released in November 2010, which debuted at"; perhaps "Get 'Em Girls was released in November 2010 and debuted..." Same with other instances of "which" following the month/year; "which" should follow the album as "which" is referring to it.
    • According to Checklinks, the source titled "Sony Snaps Up Dean and Jess" by the Daily Telegraph could use a WebCite archive link, as it shows some status issue.
  • Overall, well written and comprehensive for topic at hand. Dan56 (talk) 22:38, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
done — Oz (talk) 23:08, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from shaidar_cuebiyar
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    • I previously assessed this page for FL1, I subsequently edited it at the time of its FLRC1 and have seen it improved under efforts by Oz. I make the following suggestions:
      1. alt text for infobox photo is a little thin. Try: A 23-year-old woman is shown in upper body shot and almost in right profile. She is smiling and looking slightly to her right. She wears her dark brown-black hair down and is dressed in a black skirt with gold threads. Her right hand is on her hip or waist. The background is deep blue-purple with gold letters S and A visible.
      2. "Mauboy's first number one song" > "Mauboy's first number-one song" cf "peaked at number one"
      3. "The album was certified double platinum by the ARIA," By this stage ARIA is the default certifying agency, where no confusion exists it can be "The album was certified double platinum,"
      4. "a commercial failure" this is a heavy statement for a No. 6 album compared with a No. 11 album – how is the former a failure? If you're basing the statement on certification alone then try a more neutral comment "less commercially successful" or similar. Some description is needed of Been Waiting's longevity (59 weeks in top 50 is notable) thereby explaining why it got 2× Plat when the higher charting albums, The Journey and Get 'Em Girls both got Gold.
      5. By the time of Snopp Dogg, "peaked within the top twenty of the ARIA Singles Chart" becomes "peaked within the top twenty". Unless there's any confusion charting default is also ARIA.
      6. "To promote the film The Sapphires (2012), Mauboy" What does the casual reader know about The Sapphires? A better explanation of her association (more than just a sound track appearance) is needed.
      7. "becoming Mauboy's lowest charting single to date" Some clarification is needed: does this include the "Waltzing Matilda" single? Does this include any other singles released in NZ?
      8. For tables showing charting information consider adding |+ List of albums, with selected chart positions and certifications Adapt as required.
      9. For the refs sectn delink repeat appearances. e.g. New Limited is wikilinked first time in ref[1] but should be delinked thereafter.
      10. Some reviewers may want titles in refs to be formatted according to WP:MoS e.g. "It's an Irish Australian Idol, to Be Sure".
      11. It's good to see use of WebCite to reduce link rot problems. Some more refs might need same.
      12. For ELs I'd adjust the Allmusic one, e.g. [{{Allmusic|class=artist|id=p885471|pure_url=yes}} Jessica Mauboy] at [[Allmusic]]
      13. While there add MusicBrainz link(s). e.g. {{MusicBrainz artist|id=18f719e7-e9b4-4216-8869-9083ebc23f7d|name=Jessica Mauboy}}
    • Have fun.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 10:55, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
done I was told in a previous peer review that repeated links in refs are allowed. — Oz (talk) 11:54, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I can't remember when but I was told otherwise, but reading the various discussions, I can see the point for ref wLs to remain in each cite.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:12, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from NapHit (talk) 19:24, 9 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • "Mauboy released her debut studio album Been Waiting in November 2008 and peaked at number eleven and spent fifty-nine weeks in the top fifty" This sentence does not read correctly, I would replace the first and with it
  • Should we be mentioning that an album received nominations for awards? I'm not so sure as none of the tables mention it and I would expect to see that info in an awards and nominations article instead not a discography
  • "Mauboy's second studio album Get 'Em Girls was released in November 2010 and debuted at number six and was certified gold." sentence doesn't read well, needs revising
  • "peaked within the top twenty" surely you can say what position it peaked at?
  • In the External links Allmusic should be AllMusic

NapHit (talk) 16:38, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

done — Oz (talk) 20:08, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from TBrandley (talk) 23:18, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • "featured songs" it does still featured them though? How about "features songs"?
  • "peaked within the top twenty" what position exactly then?
  • "title track"? Could you clarify please?
  • You say 12 singles, I see 13, including that other one
  • Same for Other appearances
  • Allmusic should be AllMusic

TBrandley 17:59, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

done — Oz (talk) 20:08, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 10:17, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • "eighteen other appearances and sixteen music videos" switch those round.
  • Don't think you need to link "pop".
  • "which peaked at number eleven" which chart?
  • preceeded -> preceded.
  • Can you add which territory release dates are pertinent to.
  • "Miss You Most (At Christmas Time)" links to a Mariah Carey album.

The Rambling Man (talk) 10:01, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

done — Oz (talk) 10:12, 11 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
done — Oz (talk) 21:54, 13 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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