Orangefan32
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editSure! I'd be happy to be your mentor. Please just let me know whenever you need help. Good luck! --Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 18:04, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
- I added a box to the bottom of your userpage with some links that should be helpful. Cheers! --Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 18:13, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
Thanks so much! I will definitely be in touch when I need assistance! Orangefan32 (talk) 23:36, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
Serve America Act
editVery nice job with rewriting and expanding into prose the bullets on Serve America Act. You have a nice clean encyclopedic style. The biggest suggestion I have would be to add footnotes to point out where readers can get more details: to the parts of the legislation relevant to each paragraph, and/or to websites about the specific programs and grants created by the act.
The body section is also very large, so if you can think of some logical way of breaking it into smaller subsections, that would probably be a big aid to readers... especially if they are trying to get an overview or find coverage of some particular aspect of the legislation. I look forward to seeing what else you contribute! --Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 19:46, 31 March 2011 (UTC)
- It's looking good! I left a few suggestions on the article's talk page. Please let me know if there's anything else I can do. --Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 16:48, 11 April 2011 (UTC)
Second article
editSure. I'll take a look tomorrow morning, if that's okay. I don't think I'll have time today, as I'm rushing to get some key stuff done. --Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 20:25, 26 April 2011 (UTC)
That's totally fine! Thanks so much! I'm in the process now of trying to find some additional sources.Orangefan32 (talk) 20:29, 26 April 2011 (UTC)
- See the talk page. I linked some sources, although it might take a little bit of effort to actually get access to them. And I've left a few more comments just now.--Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 15:12, 27 April 2011 (UTC)
- It's definitely improved, but I strongly recommend getting some of those journal articles to use as sources. The first one, especially, looks like just the thing to flesh out the background section (and possibly other areas as well). You're likely to have access to it online through your school library account, and if not, the reference librarians at your library can probably help. Rather than trying to start from what's there and looking for sources, a better strategy is usually to start from the sources and build the article based on what the sources cover. If you can't find much about a specific campaign, maybe that campaign isn't that important to the overall topic.--Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 20:36, 27 April 2011 (UTC)