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The result was: promoted by Mifter (talk) 05:42, 4 December 2018 (UTC)

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Tracy LaQuey Parker

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Moved to mainspace by MrLinkinPark333 (talk). Self-nominated at 20:19, 4 November 2018 (UTC).

  • Overall: Hooks look fine, especially ALT2, DYK added in a timely manner based on the original nomination, no copyright violations. Everything is referenced. Article does have some unnecessary redlinks and one paragraph that feels problematic in places.
Comprehensive review:
Greetings! Before I review, I'll mention that I may make mistakes. Let me know if I've done so. Anyway, let's get to it: I hadn't heard of Ms. LaQuey Parker before; I'm glad I read about her contributions to the 'Net.

Here's what I see:

1. Hooks: ALT2 is easily the best hook if this article is added under normal circumstances. That's an important first. You'd have to submit your article to the April Fool's section of DYK for the others to be considered. I think that ALT2 is too good of a hook to waste, however.
2. Blurb: Short blurb, but three sentences is fine for an article of this nature. Everything in the blurb is mentioned in the main body. I think Parker Solutions Group should be unlinked; their website doesn't make it clear that it would be notable enough for a Wikipedia article.
3. Early life and education: Short section, but it's okay. Content checks out in the reference. One note though: The province was simply Newfoundland when LaQuey Parker was born there; it didn't add Labrador until 2001, four years after her spammer suit.
4. Career: Both Texas Networks should probably be unlinked; LaQuey Parker is the only person those pages are mentioned on. They could be worth mentioning on a page about some aspect of the university; by themselves, I'm not sure. First paragraph checks out.
5. Career, part 2: To me, the second paragraph is where it gets good. However, Craig Nowak needs to be unlinked for two reasons: One is that the only links on Wikipedia to Nowak are on track and field pages, and also he may not warrant notability by himself. The sentence where we're introduced to him is also not a favorite of mine because it sounds very bland. I perceive that it makes the reader wonder: Who is Craig Nowak and why should I care? There needs to be more context. Nowak was a college student from San Diego according to Wired, so that's a start. While the next sentences explain why this Nowak person was involved in the lawsuit, you should also mention the reason for the lawsuit in the first sentence. It feels jarring to mention the lawsuit and then get into the 5,000 emails without explanation. Unfortunately, coming up with a suggestion is not a specialty of mine. Also, the "after winning her case" sentence looks strange. I think you could merge that sentence with the previous one to do something like: "In November 1997, a Texas District Court ruled in favour of LaQuey Parker and fined Novak for $19,000 in damages, becoming the first person to win a lawsuit against a spammer." I think it looks and reads better that way...but that's just me. That said, you'll also note two word issues with that sentence. Favour is spelled like it is in the Commonwealth, which would be fine except that this result was given in Texas so I'm perceiving that, even though LaQuey Parker is Canadian-born, it needs to be spelled the American way. (Do correct me if I'm wrong!) Plus, Nowak is spelled with a "v" in that sentence, rather than a "w". The only other quibble I have is that Jon Lebkowsky's first name in reference 6 is spelled in all-caps for some reason. That's all I found though. Even though I just wrote a lot about the issues I had in it, I did like the content.
6. Awards and honors: While its just a one-word sentence, sometimes that's all you're able to have. Since it's referenced, this is fine with me.
That's what I saw. Overall, I think this needs only a little bit of polish in that paragraph before it's ready for DYK. Nice job. -- JustJamie820 (talk) 20:08, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

P.S. A Google search for LaQuey Parker and age led me to a genealogy site where a person of that name was said to have been born in 1963. I don't know if sites like that are reliable, however.

@JustJamie820: Cleared up typos and rewrote paragraph. Please let me know if anything else is missing. Thanks. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:53, 28 November 2018 (UTC)
  • Hello there! It looks like you've got those issues cleared up. I'm a little surprised you took the mention of the books she wrote out of the article, though. Those had value in the article and were referenced. It's up to you if you want to reinstate those mentions in an existing section, if you want to put them in a new section ("Selected works", or something of that nature? I think that's the term they use), or if you want to leave them out. This isn't going to affect the I'm giving you, however. Basically, everything that is needed out of this article is there. Good work. -- JustJamie820 (talk) 22:22, 28 November 2018 (UTC)
@JustJamie820: Thank you. For clarification, the books are still there. I moved the books before the lawsuit for chronociogical purposes. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 23:31, 28 November 2018 (UTC)
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