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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 22:22, 7 January 2014 (UTC)

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Addison Cresswell

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Created by Sealman (talk), Matty.007 (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 17:55, 27 December 2013 (UTC).

  • There are sentences which use close paraphrasing (in bold):
  • agency which has a television wing called 'Open Mike Productions'.[1]
  • I can't think of anything that could be changed to. Matty.007
  • Cresswell organised the Channel 4 Comedy Gala annually in aid of Great Ormond Street Hospital.[3]
  • The following sentence is not clear (syntax problem bolded):
  • He was behind Live at the Apollo broadcast on BBC1 and hosted by Michael McIntyre and Stand Up for the Week on Channel 4 Television from 2010.[2]
  • The sentence remains unchanged and still does not make sense. "Creswell hosted by Michael McIntyre" sounds wrong. Or was the Apollo show hosted by Michael McIntyre? In that case the conjunction "and" should be removed. Δρ.Κ. λόγοςπράξις 18:22, 5 January 2014 (UTC)
  • I edit conflicted, so may not have copied it across properly. Changed. Matty.007
  • The following sentence is unsourced and perhaps irrelevant to this bio:
  • His younger brother Luke Cresswell became a founder of the dance and percussion group Stomp.
  • Can you please put the reference at the end of the sentence: "His younger brother Luke Cresswell became a founder of the dance and percussion group Stomp." I still can't find it. In any case I still think what his brother does is irrelevant to his bio. Δρ.Κ. λόγοςπράξις 18:22, 5 January 2014 (UTC)
  • The following sentence is a list and is weak as prose:
  • His client list went on to include: Jonathan Ross,[2] Lee Evans,[9] Jack Dee,[2] Michael McIntyre,[4] Jeremy Hardy,[1] Alan Carr,[1] Marcus Brigstocke,[1] and Rich Hall.[1]
  • Subtracting these sentences, the article length may still be over 1500 characters but it could benefit from an expansion. Δρ.Κ. λόγοςπράξις 12:14, 5 January 2014 (UTC)
  • Attempted fix of issues. Matty.007 12:24, 5 January 2014 (UTC)
  • Thank you Dr.K.. Matty.007 19:02, 5 January 2014 (UTC)
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