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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 01:18, 12 March 2019 (UTC)
Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 01:18, 12 March 2019 (UTC)
- All sorts of date formats in the infobox.
- The picture in the infobox is an example of a Zond program satellite, or is only for Zond 5?
- The lead is missing what the Soviets gained from the results of the satellite.
- "a version of the Soyuz 7K-L1 crewed lunar-flyby spacecraft" Is a lot more important to mention in the first paragraph.
- "Out of four circumlunar launches, the Soviets had one partial success (Zond 4) and three failures." The parentheses could be replaced with commas.
- Same could be done for the next sentence.
- Link vivarium and Russian Academy of Sciences.
- "The spacecraft also had the ability to image the Earth. Kazan Optical and Mechanical Plant (KOMZ) developed the AFA-BA/40 imager, which was installed on the spacecraft." Did the imager take pictures of the Earth?
- "launch pad 81" You mean "Site 81"?
- "Offgas" Outgassing?
- "Zond 5 became the first spacecraft to circle the Moon and return to land on Earth. On September 18, the spacecraft flew around the Moon, although it did not orbit the Moon." Merge/reword these sentences. Mention the date first at least.
- Mention and cite splashdown coordinates.
- Maybe link the Space Race?
- "The British Interplanetary Society believed that TASS would be able to send cosmonauts around the Moon in a matter of months." What TASS?
- "Another analysis showed the flying tortoises had elevated iron and glycogen levels in their livers. The flight also affected the shape of their spleen." Merge sentences.
- Anything happened with the rest of the biological payload?
- I don't think I have access to any of the sources that explain the results, like the Drosophila results. I did plan to seek them out and include them at a later date for a FAC run. Kees08 (Talk)
- "RKK Energiya museum, in Russia." Which city?
Just a few things. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 04:48, 18 March 2019 (UTC)
@Coffeeandcrumbs: I am done for tonight if you want to rerun your date script, I accidentally reverted a couple of them. Kees08 (Talk) 05:57, 18 March 2019 (UTC)