Talk:Tropical Storm Carlotta (2018)/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 17:11, 11 April 2019 (UTC)

Will do. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 17:11, 11 April 2019

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• "Tropical Storm Carlotta was a tropical cyclone that caused flooding in southwestern Mexico" could you be more specific? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 03:24, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

  Changed to say "several states within southwestern and central Mexico." I also mention the states in the impact portion of the lead. Noah^Talk 17:59, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

• "After having increased in organization, the system was designated as a tropical depression on June 14. Late on the next day, the system strengthened into a tropical storm, after which it was named Carlotta" you could probably cut this down slightly to "Following an increase in organization, the system was designated as a tropical depression on June 14, and became a tropical storm the following evening." YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 03:24, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

  Changed. Noah^Talk 17:59, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

• "On June 16, Carlotta slowed down and unexpectedly stalled " isn't this fairly close to redundant? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 03:24, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

  Removed the part about slowing down. Noah^Talk 17:59, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

• "DamageUnknown" why list it if it's unknown? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 03:24, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

  Removed. Noah^Talk 17:59, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

• " Around that time, the NHC forecasted that a mid-level ridge over" "forecasted" is not a word. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 03:24, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

  Changed. Noah^Talk 17:59, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

• Any fluctuation in intensity on 6/16? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 03:24, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

  The MH does mention it began to intensify around 0600 on the 16th. Noah^Talk 17:59, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

• " with a contracting eye and more symmetric eyewall.[11]"link to eye (cyclone). YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 03:24, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

  Linked Noah^Talk 17:59, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

• "In the NHC's last discussion "you don't explain what that is. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 03:24, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

  reworded the sentence. Noah^Talk 18:12, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

• "and the DN-III-E Plan was activated to help with recovery efforts.[23]"what is that? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 03:24, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

  linked and gave a brief description of what the plan is. Noah^Talk 18:26, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

• The order in which impact is presented is strange. Why not go south to north instead of north to south? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 03:24, 27 April 2019 (UTC)

  changed the order. Noah^Talk 18:28, 27 April 2019 (UTC)