Talk:Tom & Gerri/GA1
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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 12:41, 23 February 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: J Milburn (talk)
Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 12:41, 23 February 2014 (UTC)
1: Well-written
- a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
- b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
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Check for WP:LAYOUT: Done
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Done
Check for WP:WTW: Done
Check for WP:MOSFICT: Done
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2: Verifiable with no original research
- a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
- b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google.)
Done
Check for WP:RS: Done
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Check for inline citations WP:MINREF: Done
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- c. No original research: Done
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3: Broad in its coverage
a. Major aspects:
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b. Focused:
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4: Neutral
Done
4. Fair representation without bias: Done
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5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes
6: Images Done (Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 2.0 Generic license)
Images:
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Done
6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: Done
6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: Done
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I'm glad to see your work here. As per the above checklist, I do have some insights that I think will be useful in improving the article:
- "Reviewers generally agreed that while less funny than previous episodes of Inside No. 9, "Tom & Gerri" was significantly darker." (Can you rephrase it to boost the flow?)
- I think the sentence "Writers Steve Pemberton and Reece Shearsmith, who had previously worked together on The League of Gentlemen and Psychoville, took inspiration for Inside No. 9 from "David and Maureen", episode 4 of the first series of Psychoville, which was in turn inspired by Alfred Hitchcock's Rope." can be broken into simpler sentences to make it easier to follow.
- "The story was inspired by their experiences, with the character of Tom having his "life energy" drained in the same way that it is when jobhunting." (I think the part in bold inhibits the flow. Can you rephrase it?)
- "Later in the evening, Tom is home alone and Migg (Pemberton), the tramp, comes to his door, having found Tom's wallet." & "Tom rewards him with £40. Migg comes back later, having spent the money on a bottle of whiskey for Tom." (Can you rephrase it without the "having…" construct? It is affecting the flow, I believe.)
Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Josh, please feel free to strike out any recommendation you think will not help in improving the article. All the best, --Seabuckthorn ♥ 23:09, 24 February 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking the time to review the article. I've adjusted the lines you brought to my attention; hopefully the prose will flow a little better now. J Milburn (talk) 11:45, 25 February 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks, Josh, very much for your diligence, care and precision in writing such great articles. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 23:43, 25 February 2014 (UTC)
Promoting the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 23:43, 25 February 2014 (UTC)