Talk:The Pirates of Orion/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 14:09, 7 October 2013 (UTC)

1. I don't think it is necessary to point out there were no guest stars in the infobox.
2. Production: "Middle school" should be uncapitalized.
3. Production: Perhaps add "producer" in front of Lou Scheimer to give a brief idea who he is.
4. Production: The script sold in April 1973, it was his first professional sale and credit as a writer. This sentence is clunky.
5. Production: After the script was used, Weinstein found that it enabled him to write the Star Trek novel The Covenant of the Crown for Pocket Books How did the script being used enable him to write a novel?

• On hold now, so my questions can be addressed. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 19:58, 8 October 2013 (UTC)

• Thanks for the review. I've removed the guest bit from the infobox, sorted "middle school" and added "producer". I split the first sentence into two, and went back to the source for the second sentence - there wasn't a great deal of detail there so rather that misinterpret it - I simply quoted the writer. Miyagawa (talk) 20:51, 8 October 2013 (UTC)