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This article is in decent shape, but it needs more work before it becomes a Good Article.
Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
In the Background section, "In 1899", it would be best if is a comma placed after "1889". Same section, it would be best if "British Empire" is linked once, per here.
In the lead, this sentence ---> "The memorial is located in front of main entrance to", is missing a word, maybe adding "the" after "of". Same section, "6th of June, 1904" needs to be fixed to "6 June 1904", per here.
B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
Thanks heaps for reviewing the article! Hopefully I've taken care of the problems:
In regard to the overlinking and missing comma, I've fixed both. (I seem to recall stupidly removing the comma at some point - no idea what I was thinking). :)
I've also got no idea how I managed to miss the missing word in the lead, either. Thanks for picking it up.
In regard to cite book, I checked, and they should all be good now. The two books are Inglis and Cameron. Richardson's "The National War Memorial, Adelaide: an historical study" is a bit odd, as it is a report rather than a book: probably best compared to an honours thesis. So I've used cite paper as the only template that I thought was appropriate, rather than cite book. The others are all journal articles, websites or newspaper articles, so they shouldn't be problem.
Thanks again for taking the time to go over the article - hopefully I've fixed the problems you identified, but if I missed something just let me know. :) - Bilby (talk) 22:27, 10 September 2008 (UTC)Reply