Talk:Smoke Gets in Your Eyes (Mad Men)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 04:35, 28 May 2012 (UTC)

• Infobox: Just checking; any production number of Guest Stars that could be put in the box?
• Lede: Link AMC
• Lede: "…the viewer doesn't learn…" Don't use contractions
• Lede: "…some of her coworkers . Junior…" Remove the space before the period
• Lede: "…interest for Mad Men didn't…" Don't use 'didn't' -> "did not"
• Plot: "having an Old Fashioned at a bar" What is this? Maybe a link would help
• Plot: "enter into the premises" I would say "onto" instead of "into"
• Conception: "Weiner's agents insisted he not" -> "Weiner's agents insisted that he not"
• Conception: In the lede it states that the show was on hold for eight years, but in this section is says "next seven years"
• Conception: "Movies were an influence [...]." -> "Movies were an influence".
• Conception: Link AMC the first time it appears
• References: Add "Academy of Television Arts & Sciences" as publisher for the emmys.com cites
• References: Ref 35 has a funny bracket issue
• References: Some newspapers have their owners in parenthesis (like 23) and others are just listed after the paper (like 26, 27, etc.) I'd pick one style to be consistent

On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 18:38, 31 May 2012 (UTC)

I wasn't the nominator of this article, but I happened to stumble by, and most of the these were pretty quick fixes. The two not struck out are the ones I didn't deal with, as I thought it'd be better for the nominator to work on those. Drovethrughosts (talk) 22:04, 31 May 2012 (UTC)

Many thanks Drovethrughosts! Everything should be good to go now. :) —DAP388 (talk) 23:45, 31 May 2012

Looks good! I will pass it now! Cheers.--Gen. Quon (talk) 23:51, 31 May 2012 (UTC)