Talk:Parti des déshérités de Madagascar/GA1

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 15:54, 4 January 2016 (UTC)Reply


Very sorry, had completely forgotten about this. Will review now.♦ Dr. Blofeld 18:41, 7 February 2016 (UTC)Reply

Lede
  • "across ethnic lines, PADESM championed the empowerment and equitable government of coastal peoples, who had historically been subjugated by the Merina and feared the MDRM could ensure their return to political dominance upon independence. They actively recruited and campaigned along ethnic lines," -avoid repetition of "across/along ethinic lines".
  • Done
  • "The party won several key political elections in the 1950s. But a" -can you avoid using "but" here it doesn't read well, perhaps try to merge sentences/rephrase?
  • Done
Founding
  • " non-Merina feared would revive Merina political hegemony, the Party for the Disinherited of Madagascar (Parti des déshérités de Madagascar, PADESM) was formed[2] in June 1946 by members of coastal communities formerly subjugated by the Merina empire, as well as highland-based descendents of former Merina " -can we avoid repeating "Merina" so much?
  • Done (but we still need to have most of them for clarity)
  • " first president after independence), Albert Sylla (who became Minister of Foreign Affairs under Tsiranana, and whose son, Jacques Sylla, would go on to become Prime Minister of Madagascar" -do we have links to articles on Ministry of Foreign Affairs (Madagscar)?
Legacy

That's great Ipigott, thanks for that. This is definitely passable now, another African GA!


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    Pass or Fail:  Dr. Blofeld 10:56, 25 February 2016 (UTC)Reply