Talk:Ortotherium

GA Review

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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 15:24, 10 May 2023 (UTC)

I'll take this one. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:24, 10 May 2023 (UTC)

Alright, thank you! AFH (talk) 16:23, 10 May 2023 (UTC)

Comments

• The external phylogeny (sloth family, etc) is currently not quite helpfully diagrammed, as the tree is rooted in the Folivora but the text discusses Edentata which is not shown. I suggest we add Xenarthra (=Edentata), Cingulata, Pilosa, and Vermilingua to the base of the tree (details and sources are provided in [{Xenarthra]], giving something like this:

Xenarthra	Cingulata (armadillos and allies) Pilosa Vermilingua (anteaters) Folivora Megalocnidae (Caribbean sloths) Nothrotheriidae (ground sloths) Megatheriidae (giant ground sloths) Megalonychidae Bradypodidae (three-toed sloths) Scelidotheriidae (two-toed sloths)
("Edentata")

• Conversely, the tree gives unnecessary (distracting) detail of 4 species of Bradypodidae, not relevant to this article: just Bradypodidae would be sufficient and better.

• "Large waterways in South America erupted" --- please reword.

• A distribution map would be useful. It would be nice to show related groups as well as Ortotherium.

• "Mandibles and teeth" would be (much) more readable with a simple diagram of a typical Xenarthran jaw, labelled with "Diastema", "Molariform", "Caniniform", "Alveoli", etc.

• "Paleoenvironment" would benefit from some sort of illustration. If there isn't a Duria Antiquior image, perhaps we can find something that suggests the ancient biotic environment, even if it's just a gallery with one of each of the major sorts of beast mentioned, i.e. a crocodilian, a notoungulate, a litoptern, a glyptodont... (and you might use a photo of tidal mudflats on the Amazon, too, maybe something like thumb|Pneumatóforos e Marismas - Praia do Belo would do, there are surely others).

• The images are properly licensed. Your drawing of the dentary does look as if it's smiling!

• The refs I checked are fine.

• There are 14 citations in the lead; there seems no good reason to have any of them up there, and many of them exist only up there contrary to policy, so I suggest we move all of them into the article body please.

• A couple of refs [31], [38] SHOUT IN UPPERCASE and need to be reformatted.

• The Ameghino refs should be linked to his article using |author-link=Florentino Ameghino.

Summary

This is a well-constructed article, and I've really only found the most minor things to mention, with a few optional suggestions. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:40, 10 May 2023 (UTC)

This should be good. AFH (talk) 21:10, 10 May 2023 (UTC)

OK. Next time, if you could mark under each "Comment" when you've done it, that makes checking much easier. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:59, 11 May 2023 (UTC)

added several images AFH (talk) 00:52, 11 May 2023 (UTC)

Nice work! Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:59, 11 May 2023 (UTC)

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