Talk:Nobel Prize in Physics/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:55, 4 May 2015 (UTC)Reply


I'll have this to you within a day or two JAGUAR  17:55, 4 May 2015 (UTC)Reply

Initial comments

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  • The lead has to be expanded and split into at least two paragraphs in order to summarise the article and comply per WP:LEAD
Done..-The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • "is an yearly award given" - a yearly award
Done..-The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • ""for the outstanding contributions for mankind in physics in the past year"" - this quote needs to be paraphrased as direct quotes are discouraged in the lead, especially in the openeing sentences
Rewrote..-The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • "year." It" - syntax error here, full stop should be after "year"
Done..-The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • "The first Nobel Prize in Physics was awarded to a German physicist Wilhelm Conrad Röntgen, "in recognition of the extraordinary services he has rendered by the discovery of the remarkable rays (or x-rays)."" - this doesn't need to be in quotes again as it would sound great without them
Done..-The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • "Though Nobel wrote several wills during his lifetime, the last was written a little over a year before he died" - this makes it sound like he wrote his will after he died?
Fixed meaning..-The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • "that it was approved by the Storting (the Norwegian Parliament)" - no need for the extra "the"
Done..-The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Half of the Nomination and selection section is unsourced!
  • Also I think that some of the smaller paragraphs in this section could be merged to create bigger ones, in order to improve prose flow
Done both..-The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • "has been "tested by time." In practice" - full stop should be after quote
Done..-The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Can the Ceremony section be expanded at all? If not possible it might be worth merging it
Merged..-The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply
  • Is the Laureates section necessary to be there? It has no content?
Left out cause there are no other links to that article. Inevitable, methinks. Remove??? -The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply

References

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  • No dead links, though the toolserver picked up one of the external links as a virus?
Arxiv is virus? Should I remove that highly reliable source? -The Heraldthe joy of the LORDmy strength 17:26, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply
I think it was a glitch on the toolserver, don't worry about it! JAGUAR  18:50, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply

On hold

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Just some prose/organistional issues that stand in the way before this can meet the GA criteria. Also one of the sections contains little sources, so that will need to be addressed too. Everything else is relatively minor though so it shouldn't be too difficult to address the rest. Good luck!   JAGUAR  15:23, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply

Close - promoted

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Thank you for addressing them all swiftly, Herald! The article has improved greatly and looks good to go.   JAGUAR  18:50, 6 May 2015 (UTC)Reply