Talk:Moments (One Direction song)

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheSpecialUser (talk · contribs) 08:20, 27 July 2012 (UTC)

Yes! →TSU ^tp* 08:20, 27 July 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for reviewing AdabowtheSecond (talk) 03:10, 28 July 2012 (UTC)

Are there any issues? AdabowtheSecond (talk) 01:25, 29 July 2012 (UTC)

Was not at home since 3 days. Sorry for the delay. There are some minor issues as well as few major ones. I'll give out the complete review in 6 hours. Again, sorry for the delay. TheSpecialUser ^TSU 01:28, 29 July 2012 (UTC)

Review

• Split the Charts into 2 seperate sections; Chart performance (containing the details) and Charts (with the chart)
• Tracklisting - it is a useless section, thus remove it
• No need of inclusion of ref in the infobox
• Images need WP:ALT
• Image in the section Charts' is of no use there. Please either move it to relevant section or remove it
• In the United Kingdom, "Moments" debuted on the UK Singles Chart at number 118 on chart issue of 3 December 2011 -> UK is repeating thus remove it
• In Canada, the song debuted on the Canadian Hot 100 at number 87 on the chart issue of 21 March 2012 -> The song also debuted on the Canadian Hot 100 at number 87 on the chart issue of 21 March 2012
• One Direction performed the song on their Up All Night Tour (2011–12) - no need of stating the year.
• "Moments" was written by Ed Sheeran and Si Hulbert, with production handled by Hulbert - "Moments" was written by Ed Sheeran and Si Hulbert, and was produced by Hulbert or "Moments" was written by Ed Sheeran and Si Hulbert. It was produced by Hulbert
• In an interview, Sheeran stated about the song -> In an interview, Sheeran talking about the song, stated,
• In April 2012, Sheeran referenced the song in an interview with Dose.ca, how he has a surge of young followers in North America. "It’s weird, in England, I see everything —... - what does this mean? Probably a change to this will fix it: In April 2012, Sheeran referenced the song in an interview with Dose.ca, and talked about how he had a surge of young followers in North America. He added that, "It’s weird, in England, I see everything —..."
• "Moments" is a song by British-Irish boy band One Direction, taken from the deluxe edition of their debut studio album Up All Night (2011) - remove (2011)
• Start a new paragraph with "Moments" received positive reviews from music critics....
• Despite not being released as a single, the song charted in lower regions on the singles charts in Australia, Canada, and the United Kingdom - you must include something about it in the article later onward, most probably in the Chart section.
• One Direction performed the song on their first headlining concert tour, the Up All Night Tour (2011-2012) - no need of stating years

TheSpecialUser ^TSU 07:57, 29 July 2012 (UTC)

Is everything addressed properly AdabowtheSecond (talk) 13:08, 29 July 2012 (UTC)

• ? How did this get passed as GA? The article has so many problems, in fact I'm going to be reassessing this. Till I Go Home 07:51, 3 August 2012 (UTC)

GA Reassessment

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Reassessor: Till (talk · contribs)

How this was passed as a Good article is something beyond me.

Issues

• Infobox—source for songwriter is not needed.
• Lead—the article is too short to contain 2 paragraphs for the lead.
• taken from the deluxe edition of their debut studio album Up All Night. --> Year?
• The song received positive reviews from music critics, praising the song's memorability and compositional structure. --> Past tense to present?
• Background—In an interview, Sheeran talking about the song, stated, --> Huh? This doesn't make sense. And anyways, what interview?
• Composition and critical reception—these two sections don't go well together.
• According to the sheet music published by EMI Music Publishing --> Unnecessary
• Written in the key of D major; vocal elements range from the note of D4 to A5. --> Awkward prose
• "Moments" is a pop ballad --> Should be stated earlier in the article
• What the f*ck makes the 'Sugarscape' and 'Pop & Glory' sources reliable?
• Charts—add 'sortable'
• Two pictures is a little much for such a short article.
• References—every 'work' paramater that isn't a printed source should not be in italics. There's some over-linking going on (e.g. Allmusic, Rovi)
• This hardly feels like a GA. It's so short.

Overall

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Till 08:03, 3 August 2012 (UTC)

I notified the main contributer to the article 10 days ago and they have made no effort to address the issues. As such, I am delisting this as a GA. The article can be renominated any time but I would suggest that the above remaining issues are fixed. Till 00:33, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 22:32, 1 January 2013 (UTC)

• Thanks for reviewing. — Robin (talk) 22:47, 1 January 2013 (UTC)

Info box

• Use Hubert's full name in the Producer parameter
• Add the previous and next song to the infobox, like on "Homeless" for example.

Lead

• You don't need to say it's from the deluxe edition
• "The track was not commissioned as a single." → Remove. You don't need to say something if it didn't happen. It's like saying that the song didn't chart in America.
• "Upon the release of Up All Night, the song charted in lower regions on the singles charts in Australia, Canada, and the United Kingdom." → Add somewhere in the sentence that it chart in tese countries due to strong digital download sales. And link digital download.

Background and composition

• Spilt these. They can have their own sections. Then name the Composition section Composition and lyrics.
• "In a November 2012 interview with MTV News" → In an interview with MTV News in November 2012,

Reception

• Rename to Critical reception
• I don't see why Sheeran's opinion is in a box quote? Not really sure if it is relevant information to be honest, I don't see how it fits in the article.
• "whom highlighted its" → whom praised its
• Unitalicise the lyrics.

Live performance

"A live performance of the song is featured on the DVD release of the tour." → The song was later included on the DVD release, One Direction: Up All Night – The Live Tour.

Tracklist

• Remove this section altogether. I notice this was raised in GA/1

Charts

• One table for 2011, one table for 2012, like on "I Got You" for example.

References

• FN1: Link Hearst Corporation
• FN2: Link The Sun
• FN4: Link Daily Mail

Go through and check that Capital FM, Roling Stone etc are linked and that MTV is not italicised. On hold. AARON• ^TALK 23:00, 1 January 2013 (UTC)

Did everything. — Robin (talk) 03:43, 2 January 2013 (UTC)

Passing. AARON• ^TALK 09:53, 2 January 2013 (UTC)

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November 2016

@98.18.212.231: Could you explain your recent edits? Si Hulbert is a writer of the song, and One Direction is English-Irish, not British-Irish. I am not quite sure why you are insisting on British in place of English. One Direction's article appears to use "English-Irish" as well. Zupotachyon (talk ⋅ contribs) Ping me with {{SUBST:reply to|Zupotachyon}} 02:39, 1 December 2016 (UTC)

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