Talk:Lynda Soderholm
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removing promotionalism and other problems
editThis article was written by a paid editor, as declared on their user page, User:Jkoka276. While Soderholm is unquestionably notable and there is no blatant advertising, it nonetheless showed traces of promotional writing; I have fixed both of them, For reference, they include: 1. The article needs to show a focus on the key element of notability as prominently as possible. This is the Fellow , AAAS, the 2nd highest distinction in American science next to NAS. Writing for Argonne, it may have seemed obvious to put the Argonne award first. But in general, in house awards don't count a all--this one is indeed one of the exceptions, along with similar distinctions from Goggle, IBM, Bell Labs, etc. so it can be included, but it doesn't have sufficient general importance to be listed first, or included in the infobox. I replaced it in the infobox with AAAS.
2. The infobox is intended to be brief. I therefore shortened the description of" known for.". In particular, she is not known for her early work on determining the structure of YBa2Cu3O7, because she was only a junior author on that project so it can not really be called "her work"
3. Material on the basic biography needs to be cited. The usual reference for this is the CV, or the nearest published equivalent. Unfortunately, I cannot fin one. Her page at he Argonne site gives essenially no information. But you must have gotten it from somewhere. Say where. (I could probably find it eventually in one or another of the award citations, but it's your job)
4.I cannot identify "Centre de Recherche Nucléaire" -- there are a number of organizations that might be mean by it. I substituted the name of the main French research organization, for the CRN is probably one or another of its divisions.
5.Some additional links to other articles were added. We normally link every organization and every major concept.
6. I rewrote some sentences for greater compactness.
7. We do not use external links within the article like form "Separation Science group leader within [https://www.anl.gov/cse/heavy-element-chemistry-and-separation-science-groups Heavy Element Chemistry and Separation Science] (HESS)," This gives the false impression that we have an article on the group. I removed hem, but if they are important to understanding there is another way: "Separation Science group leader within the Heavy Element Chemistry and Separation Science <ref> heavy element chemistry and separation science groups web page at Argonne [https://www.anl.gov/cse/heavy-element-chemistry-and-separation-science-groups]"</ref> DGG ( talk ) 04:32, 27 October 2019 (UTC)
There are now one additional things to do. IT cannot be done while the article is in draft, but it are very important. She needs to be added to the lisr of notable people at the article on the Laboratory. DGG ( talk ) 02:43, 27 October 2019 (UTC)