Talk:Logan Sapphire/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by PCN02WPS in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 15:32, 20 July 2022 (UTC)Reply


Hi there, I'll review this article. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 15:32, 20 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

Not a very long article so not a ton of comments here, but the article is quite good quality-wise regardless. Placing on hold. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:21, 21 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

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  • link Carat (mass) in first sentence
    Done. DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • I feel as though it would sound more natural to say "The Logan Sapphire has been on display in the National Gem Collection of the National Museum of Natural History in Washington, D.C., since [year]", as opposed to using "As of" (same thing for the second-to-last sentence of the article), though if you disagree, then "As of" should use {{As of}} rather than plain text.
    I like that, changed to "since 1971". DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

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  • I'd link carat here too
    Done. DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • "it had not previously undergone heat treatment" → link Heat treating
    Done. DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • "The Logan Sapphire is one of the largest faceted blue sapphires in the world" → does this mean it has the largest faces? This is a bit unclear
    No, this was meant to convey that of the faceted blue sapphires in the world, it is one of the largest of them (so referring to the entire gemstone). This was a little tricky, but I switched "faceted" and "blue", so that it now reads "one of the largest blue faceted sapphires in the world" – does that extra separation between "largest" and "faceted" help? DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • "The diamonds were likely taken from an antique bracelet or necklace." → This sentence is unsourced; if it uses Ref 2 at the end of the next sentence, just use Ref 2 here again
    Yep, ref 2 (source: "A close examination of the setting reveals that the round diamonds surrounding the sapphire likely were part of an antique necklace or bracelet that was repurposed to make the sapphire brooch/pendant.") → re-added the footnote as suggested

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Everything looks good here - formatting is good too.

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Hi PCN02WPS, thanks for the review! These comments were helpful, I've responded to each of them above. Let me know if you have any additional feedback or comments! DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

Awesome, this one looks good to me! I'm happy with the changes and I don't see anything else that would warrant fixing so I'm happy to give this a pass. Well done! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 00:37, 22 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
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