Talk:Lawrence Wetherby/GA1
Latest comment: 14 years ago by Kaldari in topic GA Review
GA Review
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- Well-written: Looks good. Noticed the following minor problems:
- "Wetherby won immediate acclaim". No context. This should say something like "Wetherby won immediate acclaim as governor".
- "Several candidates for the Democratic gubernatorial nomination were discussed". Discussed by whom?
- "Early in Wetherby's term, the state's revenues were inflated by the Korean War." Shouldn't that read "expenses" instead of "revenues"?
- "both whites and blacks". It might sound better to say "both white and black citizens" or something similar, so you're not using "white" and "black" as nouns.
- "Beauchamp believed he would succeed Wetherby as governor, so he did not openly oppose Wetherby's actions." Might want to add a "however" in there before the "so".
- "he was a delegate an assembly". Probably should read "he was a delegate to an assembly".
- Divide your references into "References"+"Bibliography", "Notes"+"References", or one of the similar conventions rather than putting both types in the same section.
- References should normally end in periods, although this is not widely enforced.
- Factually accurate and verifiable: Looks good to me. Virtually everything is cited, and most of the citations are books or articles.
- Broad in its coverage: Without knowing more about Wetherby myself, I can only assume this article is comprehensive in its coverage. It seems to cover all the major points of his political career at least.
- Neutral: I don't see anything that appears biased in the article.
- Stable: Like a rock.
- Illustrated, if possible, by images: This is a hard era to illustrate. The only advise I can offer is to look at federal photo archives and see if anything turns up. There might be something regarding school desegregation for example.
Reviewer: Kaldari (talk) 23:21, 17 December 2009 (UTC)