Talk:Ivor McIntyre

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Zawed in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 05:31, 28 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

I will review this one. Initial comments as follows:

  • No inappropriate dupe links (there is one in the lead but that's allowable).
  • Image tags checked and look OK.
  • All cites correlated to references.
  • Presentation of references appropriate.

Comments on text to follow. Zawed (talk) 05:31, 28 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

  • Lead - is it really necessary to have the bracketed text regarding future ranks in the lead itself? Maybe move them into the main body of the article?
  • "...promoted to flight lieutenant effective from 31 March." Was this a back dated promotion or was it to be effective from 31 March 1925?

And that's it for me. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 08:05, 29 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Made changes, tks for reviewing! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 12:56, 2 April 2016 (UTC)Reply
Looks good, passing as GA. Zawed (talk) 01:02, 3 April 2016 (UTC)Reply