Talk:Iconic (concert)/GA1

Latest comment: 9 months ago by Pseud 14 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grk1011 (talk · contribs) 14:40, 4 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

Hi Pseud 14, happy to take on another GA review for you. Grk1011 (talk) 14:40, 4 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

The following table is updated as the review progresses:

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (inline citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Infobox and lead

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  • Image is properly licensed
  • Where is the pop and OPM bit from the article body?
Should be the songs listed in the synopsis and setlist. However, to avoid ambiguity, I tweaked this bit.
  • "visited" seems a bit odd word choice since it seems it was mostly in the US.
Made revisions to the first para.
  • The sentences feel a bit choppy and short in the first paragraph.
Refer to second point.

Background and development

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  • I made some minor wording changes as I read through
  • I think this section should be split to make a new promotion section.
I've added a promotion section
  • What was the online promotion? Source?
It was mostly through social media, so I've added posts from Instagram and Facebook as primary sources, if acceptable (Iabot doesn't seem to capture the archiving of these, and manual Wayback archive appears to be down at the moment)
  • "leading to social restrictions making the tour impossible to go ahead." <- rephrase this
Done
  • "but there was the promise of further announcements to follow in due course" <- rephrase this
Done
Done
  • Was there any promotion for the US legs?
From what I've checked, it's all social media posts, since the US leg resumed post-COVID, much of television programs have been affected by the 2020 ABS-CBN shutdown, which is where they promoted the 2019 show.

Synopsis and reception

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  • Per MOS:PLOT (which is about fiction, but I believe it to be relevant to this too), much of this is self-source but the addition of actual refs is very helpful.

Set list

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  • "The list evolved over the course of the concert tour, and sometimes included other numbers." <-This may be true, but I would rather something less certain if there is no specific ref for it.
I've removed the second sentence instead.

Shows and canceled shows

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  • Leg 4's three refs appear to need archive links as those pages have since been updated and this information is no longer there.
All switched to the archived version
  • The canceled shows needed a bit of research to verify (listed venues, but not always the city). Overall, this still checked out.
I tried looking for other sources, unfortunately, this is the only article the detailed the cancelled shows and the cities, but it doesn't mention the venues, I assume for the same cities they visited when the tour resumed, that remained unchanged, but for those who were left out, there is no source as to which venue. Tried the production company site that handled this event, I could not seem to find the 2020 venues as well.

References

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  • Ref 2: A translated version of this appears to back up the claims between Regine and Sharon.
  • Ref 4: backs up the quote, but what was left out in between those phrases and is that necessary?
Did you mean ref 3 for the quote? I've one more line on the quote. I've only included the quotation which references her admiration of Cuneta, and tried to avoid those in Tagalog. This is the full quote from the article "Nahihiya ako kasi I’ve always idolized her ever since. The first song I memorized was Mr. DJ. So, I have a [standard] Sharon Cuneta medley, and I've even seen most of her movies—in the cinema!"
No it was ref 4, but I fixed it for you. For one of the ellipsis, there was nothing actually removed. Grk1011 (talk) 18:04, 11 March 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • Ref 11: source for the review is good.
  • Ref 13: backs up the unrivaled quote and performance.
  • Ref 25: review is also good.
  • Earwig's tool shows 16% (violation unlikely) and is mainly due to the properly attributed quotes.

Discussion

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Pseud 14 Great article. Doesn't need much! Grk1011 (talk) 14:47, 11 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

@Grk1011: thanks for taking on the review. I have actioned all points. Let me know if I may have missed anything. Pseud 14 (talk) 17:03, 11 March 2024 (UTC)Reply
Thank you, passing now! Optional suggestion: In the last 2-3 sentences of "Background and development" where you speak about the North American tour legs, add the number of tour dates for those legs with refs. Grk1011 (talk) 18:04, 11 March 2024 (UTC)Reply
@Grk1011: thanks for the edits. I've added the suggestion. Feel free to edit/revise. Much appreciate your time in reviewing. Pseud 14 (talk) 18:42, 11 March 2024 (UTC)Reply
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