Talk:HMS Rodney (29)/GA1

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 19:42, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

I'll take this - my contribution to Majestic Titan, I guess. Hog Farm _Bacon 19:42, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

• Maybe I'm misreading stuff, but it seems to me that there's a bit of disparity between the infobox and prose figures for some of the armor. Seems to me that the lower range end for the deck armor should be 3.75 in not 4.25, and I'm not seeing where the 6in minimum figure for the conning tower is coming from.
  • No, you're reading things just fine. I've screwed up the infobox. The 6 inches was a reference to the communications tube, which I later deleted without looking at the infobox.
• It never received the necessary upgrades and as a result was unfit for service by the end of 1944.
• "The port side mount was installed several years later in the position occupied by the port torpedo director" - Is the exact date known?
  • Sadly, no
• Link aircraft catapult
• Link Rosyth at the first mention, not the third. Also add that it is in Scotland at the first mention, not the third.
• "was the fourth ship of her name to serve in the Royal Navy" - The SIA page HMS Rodney suggests it was the sixth? I'd trust the Colledge & Warlow source over that uncited SIA page, but it's maybe something to look into
  • Nope, that's my miscount
• Infobox says that it was completed in August 1927. Prose says that trials began then, but doesn't explicitly mention completion date.
• Commission date varies between the prose and infobox
• "of a armoured 4.7-inch ready ammunition box" - Can we get a conversion to cm?
  • It's in the armament section
• Link River Clyde
• "Despite the heavy anti-aircraft fire, the Swordfish hit her with three torpedoes" - It's no immediately obvious that her is Bismarck here, as Ark Royal and Sheffield have both been mentioned since the last mention of Bismarck
• "Tovey decided to reduce speed to save fuel and wait until dawn as that allow his ships the maximum amount of time in which to sink the German ship" - Something is off grammatically here, probably with "allow"
  • Belike
• "As the range diminished, she began to fire torpedoes, although shock waves from near misses caused the door for her starboard tube to jam at 09:23. At 09:31, the ship blew off the left barrel of the lower aft gun turret and started a fire inside the turret that forced its evacuation" - It's not entirely clear if this damage happened to Bismarck or Rodney
• I wonder if movie star is common enough it doesn't need linked
• "The ship was sent to Rosyth for repairs on 22 August[53]" - This sentence is lacking a trailing period
  • Good catch
• Link Operation Husky
  • Linked in the lede
• "tearing a 9 ft-long (2.7 m) hole in her hull plates " - Did this not warrant getting pulled out of the fight for repairs?
  • My guess is that she wasn't pulled out for two reasons. They had no replacement for her firepower immediately available and that the damage wasn't too severe (long, but narrow, maybe?) for her crew to handle.
• "The ship also provided fire support during Operation Windsor, a partially successful Canadian assault on Carpiquet and its airfield west of Caen on 4–5 July and Operation Charnwood a frontal assault on Caen proper on 8–9 July." - I think there should be commas after the first July and after Charnwood, because the descriptions are appositives
• Location needed for Kennedy
• Boston, MA is first linked in the Bismarck section, but is actually first mentioned in the deficiencies section

That's about all I can find on this. Very impressive work. Placing on hold. Once these get fixed, I'd say this is a good ACR candidate. Hog Farm _Bacon 06:09, 24 November 2020 (UTC)

• • Thanks for reading through all this so thoroughly. Nearly all of the battleship articles will go to ACR eventually. I just need to get back in the swing of things there.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:01, 24 November 2020 (UTC)