Talk:Giosue Gallucci

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Did You Know A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on July 17, 2012.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that at the time of his death crime boss Giosue Gallucci held US$350,000 in real estate and was considered to be a millionaire?
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Reviewer: ComputerJA (talk · contribs) 17:31, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

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Hi DonCalo, I'll be happy to review this one. I specialize in Mexican crime bosses biographies so I'm excited to take a look at this. My review will be divided in two parts. In my first part, I will post any grammatical/prose corrections needed. In my second review, I will try to go through every source and verify the information (as well as checking for close paraphrasing). I'm going to try to get this done before Sunday (today), but if not, please be patient. I will work to get this soon for you. ComputerJA () 17:31, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

Since DonCalo hasn't edited in a while, I'm going to complete some minor fixes now and if they don't return in a couple days, I'll try and tackle some of the bigger issues brought up by the reviewer. I'll also add some comments of my own when I feel their needed. Libertybison (talk) 21:13, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

Part 1

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Comments: Overall, the article has great flow. There were some issues here and there with the prose and layout. The ones I wanted you to address are below, but I will be doing some minor copyedits along the way for other things I did not mention. I will do part 2 later and post it here. ComputerJA () 20:51, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

I've made some of the part 1 recommendations and left some, mostly relating to paraphrasing just in case DonCalo returns in the next day or so. If they don't, I'll return to them myself. I've also added a few comments. Libertybison (talk) 00:23, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
Introduction
  • was an old-style crime boss - What does old-style mean?
I'm not sure, so I've removed it. Libertybison (talk) 22:40, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
From Naples to New York
  • From Naples to New York – For biographies, I usually see Early life in this situation. Would you be OK with that?
I'm okay with that. Libertybison (talk) 21:41, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • According to an Italian police report he had left – add comma after report, and remove “had”
Done. Libertybison (talk) 21:41, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • 1862 report from the police in Naples– Shorten to: 1862 Naples police report
Done, also see 2 comments below. Libertybison (talk) 21:41, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • identified a Giuseppe – What is a Giuseppe? I’m guessing it's a mafia family member. Can we link him/her or make it clearer?
  • They mean it's somebody with the same surname, Gallucci. See below. Libertybison (talk) 21:41, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • and Giosuè Gallucci ascamorristi – Remove the first name since it is already stated before.
The report is from 1862, before Giosue Gallucci was born, so it's a different person. I think it's supposed to suggest they may be related. I'm not sure if the source quoted actually says this or the editor is inferring it themselves. Libertybison (talk) 21:41, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • User:Libertybison: How do you feel about me adding this sentence as a footnote: "An 1862 Naples police report identified another man named Giosuè Gallucci and Giuseppe as camorristi − Italian for a members of the Camorra −, but it is unknown if these were relatives". I feel this is somewhat out of place and might confuse the readers. ComputerJA () 17:27, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
I think that would be a great idea. Libertybison (talk) 17:48, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • but he always denied this – Always can be a WP:WEASEL word. Perhaps change to “he publically denied this?”
Done. Libertybison (talk) 21:41, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • and provided an alibi – link alibi
Done. Libertybison (talk) 21:41, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • The Grand Jury dismissed the charges – grand jury is usually not capitalized.
Done. Libertybison (talk) 21:41, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Naples responded that Giosuè Gallucci – last name only.
Done Libertybison (talk) 21:41, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "a dangerous criminal, belonging to the category of blackmailers, and for his very bad character was put under special police surveillance and confined to prison. He was charged several times with theft and association with delinquents, and was condemned nine times for theft, outrages, blackmail, lesion, and transgressions of the special police surveillance." – I think the quote may be a bit long. I think you can paraphrase the charges sentence (2nd sentence)
Done. Libertybison (talk) 20:17, 25 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • his brothers Gennaro, Vincenzo and Francesco in Italy - perhaps you can link these per WP:REDLINK. The last two have articles in Italian Wikipedia. [1] [2]
The two Italian Wikipedia article are for different people with the same names from the 20th century. I can't tell if the brothers are notable enough for their own articles, I don't know how notable they are in Italian criminal history. They're sort of in the background in Giosue's story, at least in the U.S. part. Libertybison (talk) 21:54, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • could not be deported – link deported with deported
Done Libertybison (talk) 21:41, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
King of Italy
  • Gallucci eventually built various businesses in – Do the sources say when?
Presumably it was since Gallucci's second arrival in the U.S. Removed eventually, it's sort of used as a weasel word here anyway. Libertybison (talk) 01:45, 7 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • He would become the undisputed boss– Change to “He became”
Done. Libertybison (talk) 22:38, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • nobody ran numbers without paying tribute to Gallucci. – Consider rephrasing “nobody” per WP:WEASEL.
Removed. Libertybison (talk) 23:06, 25 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • was almost certainly – “commonly” instead?
Done. Libertybison (talk) 22:38, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • USD 2,000 diamond ring and USD 3,000 – change amounts to US$2,000 and US$3,000
Done. Libertybison (talk) 22:38, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
Political influence
  • He gained virtual immunity – Never seen this phrasing before. Would de-facto be better?
I think using near would be better than de facto, so I've changed it to that. Libertybison (talk) 22:56, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "a certain measure of immunity from police interference."[2][6][18] – Would you be able to spread out these sources? Seems like a minor WP:CITEKILL issue, especially because it should not be difficult to cite the New York Herald for these two quotes.
This already seems to have been done. Libertybison (talk) 20:33, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Last paragraph of Political influence – This paragraph is almost all about quotes. Please paraphrase accordingly.
I don't understand what you're asking. All the quotes are Gallucci's opinion/interpretation so they can't really be paraphrased. Do you want the size of the quote reduced? Libertybison (talk) 22:58, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
Quotes can always be paraphrased. But this isn't my biggest concern with the article. It is mostly GangRule as a source. ComputerJA () 13:43, 20 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
Killing his brother?
  • Title of section – I do not think the title name is appropriate. Perhaps change to Death of sibling, that way we give equal weight to all points of view.
I agree and have made the change. Libertybison (talk) 22:50, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Gennaro had arrived – remove had
Done. Libertybison (talk) 22:50, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • complaints about extortion practices – link extortion
Done. Libertybison (talk) 22:50, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
Done. Libertybison (talk) 22:50, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • claimed that Giosuè Gallucci had been responsible – use his first name only as you did before in this section.
Done. Libertybison (talk) 22:59, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • In contrast, Gallucci blamed Aniello Prisco – first name too, unless you want to stick with using his last name throughout the entire article, though it might be difficult in this section given Gennaro’s mention.
Done. Libertybison (talk) 22:59, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • notorious lame and feared gangster from Harlem – what does lame mean? Also, be careful with WP:WEASEL. When I write biographies about criminals, I usually put “high-ranking” instead of powerful. Consider revising this to avoid weasel words.
Removed weasel words. It says "Zopo" was the leader of a gang in the next paragraph which should be enough. Crippled would be better than lame but it might be an unnecessary detail without more information about what was wrong with him. Libertybison (talk) 01:32, 7 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
Fighting over underworld control
  • "At that time Gallucci controlled different gambling games and he would get a percentage on the sale of stolen horses and peddled artichokes. If anybody would not pay this percentage he would either be assaulted, receive blackmail letters or be killed." - This can be paraphrased.
This is a direct quote of Daniello, it can't be reworded and still be an accurate quote of what he said. Libertybison (talk) 20:07, 25 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • The report continued to explain – Change to: The report also explained
Done. Libertybison (talk) 23:21, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • brothers Fortunato and Tomasso LomonteWP:REDLINK for these? Not sure, I will leave it up to you.
Done. I've also tried to improve the wording of that sentence as well. Libertybison (talk) 23:21, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • immune from Black Hand extortion – remove link from Black Hand since it has been used elsewhere, per WP:OVERLINK.
Done Libertybison (talk) 23:21, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • known as the King of the White Slavers in the press – does not italicize per MOS:ITALICS. Do “King of the White Slavers”.
Done. Libertybison (talk) 23:21, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • on a USD 10,000 bail – Change to US$10,000
Done. Libertybison (talk) 23:21, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • The Neapolitan Del Gaudio brothers, who had connections – Should the brothers be red linked per WP:REDLINK?
I'm not sure, but I'm going to say no for now because of a lack of information I could find on them and the stricter policy on creating biography articles on criminals. But if I'm wrong and articles end up being created later we can just add links to those articles then. Libertybison (talk) 21:08, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • He fled from Italian Harlem – change he to Del Gaudio.
Done. Libertybison (talk) 23:30, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • no charges were ever made – remove ever.
Done. Libertybison (talk) 23:30, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
Murder
  • Prisco's old outfit lingered on – what does the old outfit mean? This sentence is a bit confusing, consider revising.
Done. Libertybison (talk) 20:17, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • after the latest in a series had been shot and killed – his last groups of bodyguards were shot and killed? Let me know and I will copyedit it a bit.
The Tuesday May 15, 1015 New York Herald article said Gallucci's last bodyguard (just one person) had been shot and killed on May 8th (or as the article put it "a week ago Saturday night"). Libertybison (talk) 20:46, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Gallucci had been wounded and two … bodyguards had been killed – “was wounded” and “were killed”
Done. Libertybison (talk) 23:54, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Meanwhile, the Morellos had fallen out with – who are the Morellos? Consider putting the Morellos clan or something like
I've clarified that it was the Morello gang. Libertybison (talk) 23:54, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Gallucci foresaw his execution – does it say when?
The newspaper article says that he told a friend about a week prior, so I've now added that. Libertybison (talk) 20:30, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • were springing up right under his nose – idiom, consider revising.
Done. Also moved it to the previous paragraph where it would make more sense. Libertybison (talk) 21:01, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • possibly was the biggest one ever for a member of the underworld – Do you have access to the source? Seems like this is using WP:WEASEL again. Perhaps rephrase “one of the biggest funerals for organized crime members” or something like that?
I've removed the phrase. Libertybison (talk) 21:01, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Harlem when the hearse – link hearse.
Done. Libertybison (talk) 23:50, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Giosuè Gallucci refused to talk to the police – remove first name.
Done. Libertybison (talk) 23:50, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Like most underworld killings, Gallucci's murder remained unsolved. – most underworld killings in NYC? I would specify to reduce the scope.
I've removed the editorializing phrase and just kept it focused on Gallucci's death. I think it's more encyclopedic that way. Libertybison (talk) 23:50, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • buy USD 300 worth of tickets – change to US$300
Done Libertybison (talk) 23:50, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • he and his son were shot – say “his son and him”
Done Libertybison (talk) 23:50, 5 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
Burial and legacy
  • According to the New York Herald – italicize the newspaper
Done. Libertybison (talk) 00:09, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • he held USD 350,000 in real estate – US$350,000
Done. Libertybison (talk) 00:09, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • only USD 3,402 in cash – US$3,402
Done. Libertybison (talk) 00:09, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
Legacy
  • According to some, Don Fanucci, a fictional character – according to whom?
The some is the blog post used as the source. It appear to be the blogger's opinion from watching the movie and not come from any source mentioned by the blogger. I'd recommend removing this Godfather fact a unsourced. But I'd like to wait a day or so to see if DonCalo returns in case they might be able to better source the claim. This comment also applies to point below. Libertybison (talk) 00:09, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
I've since removed the claim. Libertybison (talk) 02:47, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • seems to be based on Giosuè Gallucci – remove seems and put is, and remove the last name.
See above. Libertybison (talk) 17:19, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

Part 2

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Comments: Now this is the part that gets difficult. I found some serious close paraphrasing issues here and there, and those need to get addressed immediately. In some parts, the sources did not support the text (usually off by a few critical details). This often happens when writing an article with a bunch of sources so I get it. Chances are the text is supported by another source cited elsewhere, but we still need to make sure the text is 100% across the board. Another of my biggest concerns is Gang Rule. Does not seem like a reliable sources at first glance, so I want to get your input. I understand it has valuable information (since this happened over 100 years ago, the information we have is scarce and it's easy to use Gang Rule to update an article). Please let me know what you think. ComputerJA () 01:33, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

  • Source 1 – [3] Is Gang Rule a reliable source? I have my doubts.
I think it depends on the specific article on the site. Unfortunately, I don't think this applies to the biographies of the Galluccis, with the exception of the information that comes from Genarro's death certificate which is shown and used as a source. Libertybison (talk) 08:02, 7 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • born in Naples, Italy, in 1865 – Please add the entire DOB since it is in the infobox. Remember to use a reliable source for this.
Other sources, including Critchley, say 1864 not 1865. This appears to be an error in GangRule. I was trying to figure out why the Gennaro page was cited. It turns out that it includes an image of Gennaro's death certificate with his parents names on it. Although Giosue and Gennaro could have different mothers. Libertybison (talk) 23:48, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • In April 1898, he was arrested in New York in connection with the murder of Josephine Inselma …. Gallucci said he had no reason to kill the woman and provided an alibi – According to both sources, the murderer was Joshio Galluca. There is no mention of Galluci.
It looks like it's just written nearly phonetically. Critchley's book also cites a newspaper article about the story, although it's in a footnote (pg. 274 n35) Libertybison (talk) 23:48, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • The police prefect of Naples responded that Gallucci was "a dangerous criminal, belonging to the category of blackmailers, and for his very bad character was put under special police surveillance and confined to prison. He was charged several times with theft and association with delinquents, and was condemned nine times for theft, outrages, blackmail, lesion, and transgressions of the special police surveillance." – This quote does not mention Josephine and fails to establish how this quote is related to the murder. This was actually said in 1893. Again, one of the sources said that Gallucci was walking with Josephine when she was killed. He was arrested, but the man in question was Joshio from what I understood. Gallucci was arrested and released the next day per source [4]
You're incorrect the article you link to is from 1898, not 1893. The letter in the article says 1898, Chronicling America site says it's from 1898, one of the other articles on the page refers the Democrats' 1896 platform, and one of the articles refers to annexation debate over Hawaii which didn't occur until 1898. (Grover Cleveland the president from 1893-1897 was against the annexation of Hawaii.) As for the comment about "Joshio" see my comment above. Libertybison (talk) 21:24, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • The criminal background of his brothers Gennaro – No mention of Gennaro in source.
I've reworded the paragraph to reflect that. Libertybison (talk) 21:40, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Vicenzo – The source spells his name with an s, Vicenso. Was it misspelled?
I assume so, misspelled Italian names are common in newspapers of this period. Libertybison (talk) 08:02, 7 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • described as a blackmailer who spent two terms in prison and was condemned sixteen times for assault, attempted murder and other crimes – This was literally copied verbatim. Please remove or paraphrase this.
Done. Libertybison (talk) 20:31, 25 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Russomano was acquitted of the murder because he fired in self-defence. – which of the sources supports this? Please add a citation for this sentence.
Added source and correction, he wasn't acquitted no charges were filed because the coroner's jury determined it was self-defense. Libertybison (talk) 05:34, 25 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • was condemned six times for attempted murder and theft and for assaulting policemen – Plagiarism. Please revise.
Done. Libertybison (talk) 20:31, 25 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • was murdered in New York City on November 20, 1898 – He died the following day, per source.
Fixed. Libertybison (talk) 21:34, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • (probably the Neapolitan Camorra) – This is not mentioned or suggested in the source.
Removed. Libertybison (talk) 08:02, 7 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Gallucci eventually built various businesses in East Harlem; first in Mulberry Street and later in a three story brick house with a bakery and an attached stable at 318 East 109th Street.[14] – This uses Gang Rule, which I am not sure how I feel about its reliability. Have other reliable sources used Gang Rule?
  • Newspapers at the time wrote about him as a legitimate businessman; the personification of a successful immigrant. – I read the entire excerpt on him and the newspaper did not describe him as legitimate. The source starts explaining his murder and then how he “controls” businesses. I’d say revise this to something that describes him more as a mafia boss.
I've removed the whole sentence. Libertybison (talk) 20:12, 24 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • His elder brother, Gennaro Gallucci (born 1857) – Source says Genario, and no mention of his DOB. Perhaps we can add a footnote for the different ways the name was spelled. Let me know if you need help.
I've removed to DOB. I don't know if a footnote is necessary, maybe we can just add a non-newspaper source citation with the correct spelling along with the newspaper source? Libertybison (talk) 21:48, 19 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • New York Police captured him on September 20, 1909 – Source says the 14th, but then again it is Gang Rule.
The New York Times article says the 20th, Gang Rule is wrong. Libertybison (talk) 20:25, 24 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • However, the courts were unaware of his full criminal background and released him with a suspended sentence. The police believed his killing two months later may have been connected to Gennaro's blackmailing activities. The bakery of the Galluccis had been attacked only a few months before when bullets smashed through the window. In letters that were sent to the police, some informants claimed that Giosuè had been responsible for the killing of his brother. – Major close paraphrasing from Gang Rule.
  • In contrast, Giosuè blamed Aniello Prisco – nicknamed "Zopo the Gimp” – No mention of this nickname in source. He was known as the King of the Black Hand, per source.
I found this 1913 article that refers to him by this nickname. Libertybison (talk) 05:31, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
The Mike Dash book also mentions that nickname but I can't see the page number on Google Books. I'll use that as a source once I find the page number. Libertybison (talk) 20:29, 7 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
Added source for nickname. Libertybison (talk) 05:34, 25 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • At the time, the police described him as "the leader of the Italian criminals in Harlem" and that "his consent was necessary before anything out of the way could be done in Harlem's Little Italy." Speculation about the reason behind the arrests was that it could have been an attempt to smash Gallucci's vice ring – The source never explicitly mentions Gallucci. I could not find the quotes either.
  • a transgression of the Sullivan Act – no mention of this on either of the two sources, though one is Gang Rule.
They mention that it was for a concealed weapon, the Sullivan Act link explains that it was the law behind those changes. Libertybison (talk) 03:23, 25 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • no one could operate a lottery, a poolroom or a saloon without Gallucci's permission – close paraphrasing.
I've removed that sentence along with some slight rewording of the rest of the paragraph. Libertybison (talk) 20:51, 25 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Legacy section – the source seems to be unreliable. [5]
Removed. Libertybison (talk) 02:43, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • ComputerJA has put this review on hold for a week to see if DonCalo will return by then. I think that's a good idea, so I'll hold off on addressing other review comments until 13 March but I'd still like to try to work on the review if we don't hear from DonCalo by then. Libertybison (talk) 20:29, 7 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
Maybe we should still wait another week to see if DonCalo returns before starting to address the other review comments. Libertybison (talk) 06:39, 13 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
@Libertybison - I'm somewhat undecided about pushing the date, since GangRule is an unreliable source and it is used a lot in this article. I can access the books GangRule reportedly goes by and help DonCalo or other editors update the article appropriately, but that would mean we would need another reviewer for GA3. ComputerJA () 15:27, 13 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
If you feel like you can no longer be a reviewer for this article, than it may be best to end it now. Otherwise, I'd recommend waiting another week for DonCalo. Libertybison (talk) 16:17, 13 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

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Hi, I want to request for a second opinion. Libertybison has done a great job of improving my requests/concerns in DonCalo's (the original nominator) absence. I left the review open for one week and was then asked to push it for another to see if DonCalo returned. The article is well-written, comprehensive, and overall it looks ripe for promotion. My only concern is with its use of the source GangRule.com. I sent this concern to the Reliable Source Noticeboard a couple of weeks ago. GangRule.com reportedly is based off two reliable books, The Origin of Organized Crime in America and The First Family. But there is no way to know which pages GangRule is basing its information from. That is my only concern with the article now. ComputerJA () 13:54, 20 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

My personal opinion is that GangRule is not reliable enough for the way it is used (which seems to reflects the reliable noticeboard and your opinion). Some of the information it is cited to falls into the 2b category so I would fail it if that cannot be resolved. However, I read that you have access to the reliable sources and might be willing to add these citations to the article, but would not feel comfortable passing it. Since it has come this far, if you are agreeable, I am willing to offer my services as a second reviewer for the 2b criteria if you replace the GangRule cites. AIRcorn (talk) 07:20, 30 April 2017 (UTC)Reply
@Aircorn: Thanks for accepting to take this review. I just ordered The Origin of Organized Crime in America through an interlibrary loan (it usually takes about two weeks max to arrive). The First Family book should be in my hands earlier since I just put it on hold at the library. I'll let you know when I get a hold of them and will work with User:Libertybison to promote this to GA. Thanks again! ComputerJA () 23:06, 1 May 2017 (UTC)Reply
I have this watchlisted, but my watchlist is pretty crowded nowadays. Feel free to ping me or drop a talk page notice when you are ready for me to take a look if I don't respond. AIRcorn (talk) 09:11, 17 May 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • I think we will have to fail this one. I have the two books with me and I cannot seem to be able to reconcile the article's text with the sources. Here are a few examples (this is not the entire list of things needed to be addressed. I stopped after realizing that everything I was checking from GangRule had some issues):
December 10, 1864 to Luca Gallucci and Antonia Cavallo – none of the books mention 10th, nor his parents. The previous nominator got the parents’ names from Gennaro’s death certificate, which lists his parents. But there is no mention of Giosue in the certificate.
However, the courts were unaware of his full criminal background and released him with a suspended sentence. The police believed his killing two months later may have been connected to Gennaro's blackmailing activities. The bakery of the Galluccis had been attacked only a few months before when bullets smashed through the window. In letters that were sent to the police, some informants claimed that Giosuè had been responsible for the killing of his brother. In letters that were sent to the police, some informants claimed that Giosuè had been responsible for the killing of his brother. – First thing, the last sentence is close paraphrasing. In addition, I could not find all this information on Critchley’s book. The only mention of Genarro is on page 109 (only mentions his death). There is a short mention of Genarro’s death in Dash's book too, but not this.
Rephrased and I found another source about letters claiming that Giosuè had been responsible for the killing of his brother [6] DonCalo (talk) 20:34, 2 May 2023 (UTC)Reply
first in Mulberry Street and later in a three story brick house with a bakery – There are several mentions of Mulberry Street in Dash’s book (and crime activity there), but no direct correlation to Galluci. No mention of this street in the other book.
or "The Mayor of Little Italy" – Could not find this title in both books (nor in Nelli’s).
Replaced with "The Boss" as he is also called in many sources. DonCalo (talk) 10:27, 2 May 2023 (UTC)Reply
was also known as the "King of the White Slavers" in the press – ditto.
I found two sources that literally or approximately confirm this: Buy Five Girls at $10 Apiece; Arrest Sellers, New York Tribune, May 23, 1915; and 10 Held When Gunman Exposes 23 Murders, New York Tribune, November 28, 1917. DonCalo (talk) 12:59, 24 April 2023 (UTC)Reply
If renominated for GA again, we would have to discard GangRule's claims and try to reconcile every claim made in this article that is attributed to GangRule using other sources (in the two books above and probably in other sources). I'm sadden to have to fail this, since Libertybison did an excellent work throughout the GA process in DonCalo's absence. I also want to thank AIRcorn for volunteering to take a second look. I'll leave this open till Friday, May 26 in case you guys have any additional comments. I'll be around if you guys need me. ComputerJA () 01:51, 24 May 2017 (UTC)Reply
I have replaced several Gangrule references with other sources. Paradoxically, the more other sources I find, the clearer it becomes that Gangrule is well researched and is actually a quite reliable website. DonCalo (talk) 21:19, 2 May 2023 (UTC)Reply
Gangrule is being updated and sources are being added. The site was launched 20 years without sources, this is slowly being rectified. The Gallucci page has been updated. Yiofjld400 (talk) 20:10, 29 November 2023 (UTC)Reply
Don't feel too bad, you tried your best. AIRcorn (talk) 06:22, 24 May 2017 (UTC)Reply
ComputerJA, I'd like to thank you for all the extra effort you put in to see if this article could be promoted to GA without DonCalo. I guess it wasn't meant to be, this time. I do think the article is much better following the review and your suggestions for improvement. Libertybison (talk) 16:13, 27 May 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hello everyone, thanks for trying to promote the article to GA in my absence. I will look into the remaining issue to see if we could try again. - DonCalo (talk) 22:56, 5 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

@DonCalo please don’t do this, it should be archived, this is not a pr. remove your comments after it was failed pls 48JCL 23:49, 18 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

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Nominator: DonCalo (talk · contribs) 17:16, 25 April 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Kimikel (talk · contribs) 01:45, 10 October 2024 (UTC)Reply


Hello, I am going to review this article as part of the October GA backlog drive. I should be done within a week. Kimikel (talk) 01:45, 10 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

@DonCalo: I've finished my review, see below. Two main points: 1. Any time a source is directly quoted, an inline citation is needed immediately at the end of the sentence; and 2. I don't believe Gangrule meets WP:SPS criteria and should not be used as a source; HOWEVER, I don't think it will make a huge impact on the article (see my comment below). Please let me know if you have any questions or concerns with my suggestions, or if you will not be able to complete the edits in a timely manner. Thank you. Kimikel (talk) 02:25, 11 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
@Kimikel: Thanks for the review. Regarding the main points. 1. I did this with almost all of the direct quotes, unless it looked over-exaggerated when the source was already referenced multiple times in the same paragraph. Regarding 2, since the previous GA reviews, Gangrule has been updated and reliable sources have been added to that site. The article on their site is now very well referenced. Even better than some of the books that are used as reliable sources. In addition, due to the frequent misspelling of Italian names in the newspaper sources at the time, the Gangrule article is some times essential to connect the dots. That said, in preparation to this GA review, I updated almost every reference to Gangrule with an additional reference to another reliable source. Which convinced me that Gangrule is reliable and can be used on its own as well. Moreover, since the well-researched Gangrule article is available online it seems odd not to mention it here on wikipedia. - DonCalo (talk) 20:34, 14 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
@DonCalo: Thank you for the edits you've made thus far. Regarding Gangrule, I agree that it is a well-made website and that it contains a lot of useful information; the problem I have with is that it is a self-published source, which according to WP:SPS, are "largely not acceptable as sources". It makes an expert for subject matter experts who have previously published work in the field with "reliable, independent" publishers. Jon Black does have a book published according to his website; however, it doesn't really seem like the publisher meets those criteria. Unless he has work published somewhere else that meets the previous criteria, it would be best to exclude it from the article. Kimikel (talk) 00:32, 15 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
@Kimikel: Thanks for your considerations. On the use of self-published sources, I generally agree in 99 per cent of cases, but there are always exceptions to the general rule. That applies to Gangrule. Its author, Jon Black, is a respected researcher who has collaborated on David Critchley's academic book, The Origin of Organised Crime in America, among others (as acknowledged in the book). Early versions of Gangrule were based on that book, but Black has done further research. For this article, I have checked Black's sources as far as possible and they turn out to be reliable (I also provided those sources in the article). Hence, I think an exception to WP:SPS is in order here. - DonCalo (talk) 08:27, 15 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
@DonCalo: I think that argument's fair enough; since his work was used for a formally published book, I won't fight you anymore on that topic. I'll do a final read over of the article soon, and after that it should be good to go. Kimikel (talk) 01:36, 17 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
@Kimikel: Thanks for you understanding. I was not aware we had a fight. I rather think it was a civil discussion on the merits of the article and its sources. - DonCalo (talk) 07:57, 17 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
@DonCalo: "Fight" was probably the wrong word; I'm glad that we were able to discuss and come to a positive conclusion. I appreciate all the work you've done on this article and I'm ready to close it out as a pass. Thank you, and congratulations on the good article! Kimikel (talk) 03:33, 18 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

Well-written

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Early life

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  • "a Naples Court" > a Naples court   Done
  • "Rumour had it" > It was rumoured that   Done

Dominance

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  • ""grand drawing."" > "grand drawing".   Done
  • "was only one prize, $1,000, but the one who won" > was only one prize of $1,000, and the winner of   Done with a minor adaptation: was only one prize of $1,000, but the winner of
  • "While he paraded through Harlem swinging a loaded cane, he was always immaculately dressed in tailored suits with a magnificently waxed mustache, an expensive $2,000 diamond ring and $3,000 diamond shirt studs." > This sentence is not very encyclopedic. Something like "He was often seen in Harlem with a loaded cane, wearing tailored suits, a $2,000 diamond ring, and a $3,000 diamond shirt studs."   Done I changed it into: He was often seen in Harlem swinging a loaded cane, immaculately dressed in tailored suits with a magnificently waxed mustache, an expensive $2,000 diamond ring and $3,000 diamond shirt studs.
  • "He denied the allegations." > this sentence is too vague to stand by itself, either elaborate or combine it with the next sentence.   Done I elaborated: "He denied the allegations that he was involved in criminal activities."

Political influence

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  • "Under these circumstances Gallucci could easily deny the charges against him" > this whole paragraph is pretty must just a single quote from Gallucci anyway, you might as well make it another block quote   Not done It is not really a single quote. I think it is fine like this.

Death of brother

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  • "Aniello Prisco – nicknamed "Zopo the Gimp",[35] a gangster from Harlem – for" > Aniello Prisco, a gangster from Harlem nicknamed "Zopo the Gimp", for   Done

Fighting over underworld control

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  • "the brothers Fortunato" > brothers Fortunato   Not done are you sure? I don't see the improvement here.
  • "some press reports were" > some press reports, were   Done

Murder

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  • "In an effort to defend him" > While trying to defend Gallucci,   Done
  • "coffee shop and some" > coffee shop, and some   Done
  • "22 carriages for" > 22 of which carried   Done
  • "when the hearse after had" > after the hearse had   Done
  • "settle the case himself" > settle the issue himself   Done

Burial

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  • "Calvary Cemetery (Queens)" > Cavalry Cemetery in Queens   Done
  • "view the remains" > view his body   Done
  • "Gallucci's last journey" > Gallucci's funeral procession   Done
  • "23-strong" > 23-man   Done
  • "wrote the Herald" > change to "The Herald wrote that" and move to front of sentence   Done
  • "The lucrative numbers rackets left behind by Gallucci became free for the taking" > Gallucci's lucrative numbers rackets were left unclaimed   Done
  • "took over control" > took control   Done

Footnotes

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  • "An 1862 Naples police report identified another man named Giosuè Gallucci and Giuseppe as camorristi − Italian for a members of the Camorra −, but it is unknown if these were relatives" > An 1862 Naples police report identified brothers Giosuè and Giuseppe Gallucci as members of the Camorra, but it is unknown if they were relatives of Gallucci's.   Done
  • Remove second footnote   Not done I put it in footnote instead of a trivia section; it is not really important, but a lot of people know more about The Godfather movie than Italian crime history in NY, so I thought that it was a nice gesture.

Verifiable

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  • I agree with the prior reviews; Gangrule does not seem to meet WP:SPS guidelines. I don't think it should be used in the article. HOWEVER, I also don't think that's grounds for failure. Gangrule does cite well; try to see if you can replace Gangrule with some of its sources. If not, just remove the information you can't substantiate without Gangrule.
Since the previous GA reviews, Gangrule has been updated and reliable sources have been added to that site. The article on their site is now very well referenced. Even better than some of the books that are used as reliable sources. In addition, due to the frequent misspelling of Italian names in the newspaper sources at the time, the Gangrule article is some times essential to connect the dots. That said, in preparation to this GA review, I updated almost every reference to Gangrule with an additional reference to another reliable source. Which convinced me that Gangrule is reliable and can be used on its own as well. Moreover, since the well-researched Gangrule article is available online it seems odd not to mention it here on wikipedia. - DonCalo (talk) 17:59, 14 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • "Inselma was murdered with "her throat cut from ear to ear" in her apartment at 108 Mulberry Street within a block of the infamous Mulberry Bend." > needs citation after period due to quote   Done
  • " "a young grocer and expressman, with a store at 172 Mott Street"" > also needs citation   Done
  • ""bad character" and "a dangerous criminal, belonging to the category of blackmailers"" > both need citations at the end of that sentence at the lastest   Done
  • ""rascals" from Naples and Sicily who had made New York City their home." > needs a citation   Done
  • ""as a class, they rob their own people, and the Italian scheme of 'fix it myself' interferes to throw the police off the scent." " > needs citation   Done
  • "Gallucci complained a week before he was killed." >needs citation   Not done The source is already mentioned four times in that paragraph. I think it is clear.
  • "certainly the most powerful Italian politically in the city, and during campaigns was exceptionally active." . > cite   Done
  • "he would either be assaulted, receive blackmail letters or be killed." "> cite   Done
  • ""secret society similar to the Mafia"" > cite   Done

Spot check

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  1. 29: Citation should be done the same way as the rest so that it links to your sources   Done Well, kind of, the reference does not link to the source. I don't know how to fix that. - DonCalo (talk) 20:21, 14 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
  2. 56: It's only implied that the pair were the Galluccis, and this is a primary source document posted on a website somewhere; I'd say it'd be better to remove this entirely.   Not done According to the editor: "The father-son murders appear to be a reference to Giosue and Luca Gallucci." I think this is sufficient ground to keep it. - DonCalo (talk) 20:26, 14 October 2024 (UTC)Reply
  3. 45: Verified
  4. 16 Verified
  5. 11: Verified

Broad

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  • Broad in its coverage

Neutral

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  • Neutral

Images

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  • No issues, all published before 1929

Stable

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  • Stable
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