Talk:Finn the Human and Jake the Dog

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 01:56, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Gen. Quon (Talk)

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 01:56, 8 January 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors: .
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD: Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done Check for Introductory text:  Done Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn ... with his family and his dog, Jake on a farm." (not a concise summary of the Plot section, few important points like events after the "wish" and the "crown" are not in the lead, while "Finn is then warped ... Jake on a farm" is not in the body.) Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and ... and Cloris Leachman as Farmworld Marceline." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 3: Reception ""Finn the Human" was watched by 3.435 million viewers and received largely positive critical acclaims, with many critics writing that the episode was a creative challenge." (not a concise summary of the Reception section) Check for Relative emphasis:  Done Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn ... with his family and his dog, Jake on a farm." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and ... and Cloris Leachman as Farmworld Marceline." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 3: Reception ""Finn the Human" was watched by 3.435 million viewers and received largely positive critical acclaims, with many critics writing that the episode was a creative challenge." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done ""Finn the Human" is the fifth season premiere of the American animated television series Adventure Time. Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done Check for Proper names and titles:  Done Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None Check for Pronunciation: None Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done Check for Biographies: NA Check for Organisms: NA Check for Biographies of living persons: NA Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done Check for Non-English titles: Check for Usage in first sentence: Check for Separate section usage: Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

WP:LAYOUT:

Done Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done Check for Headings and sections:  Done Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done Short paragraphs and single sentences generally do not warrant their own subheading. Paragraphs should be short enough to be readable, but long enough to develop an idea. (WP:BETTER) Merge Background and Events sections to fix the short paragraph "In the fourth season finale, Finn and Jake are tricked by the Lich—disguised as the hero Billy—into opening a portal to the multiverse by using the Enchiridion. After the Lich passes through, Finn and Jake give chase, and a mysterious new reality is created.". Fix ""Finn the Human" first aired on Cartoon Network ... "Jake the Dog". the episode ... at the time of the airing." in the Reception section. There is also a 1a issue: the should be The. Fix "After being pulled into the portal, ... into the reality created by his wish." in the Events section. Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done Check for Works or publications:  Done Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO): None Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER): None Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL): None Check for Links to sister projects: None Check for Navigation templates:  Done Check for Formatting:  Done Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done Check for Links:  Done Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done

WP:WTW:

Done Check for WP:WTW:  Done Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None Check for Offensive material (WP:F***): None Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done

WP:EMBED:
None Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE): Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

WP:RS:

Done Check for WP:RS:  Done Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (not contentious)  Done Is it contentious?: No Does the ref indeed support the material?: Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Who is the author?: Seibert, Fred (Frederator Studios) Sava, Oliver (The Onion) Larry Leichliter (Cartoon Network) Stopera, Dave (BuzzFeed) Moynihan, Jesse (JesseMoynihan.com) Bibel, Sara (Zap2it) Kohn, Eric (Snagfilms) Does the author have a Wikipedia article?: What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?: What else has the author published?: Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?: Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Frederator Studios The Onion Cartoon Network BuzzFeed JesseMoynihan.com by Jesse Moynihan Zap2it Snagfilms Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

WP:MINREF:

Done Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done Check for Direct quotations:  Done "never even ever existed." (no inline citation) "mutagenic bomb" (no inline citation) "really fit in the Adventure Time world".[6] (Check on source 6, successful, "With Finn and the viewer experiencing an alternate timeline, I thought it would be cool to design some characters that didn’t really fit in the Adventure Time world.") "a little bit jarring" ... [6] (Check on source 6, successful, "The tone is I think, a little bit jarring, so I was worried that viewers would be put off by it") "loosely inspired by the Japanese manga series Fist of the North Star.[6] (no end quote after inspired) (Check on source 6, successful, "heir look was loosely inspired by the Fist of the North Star. Pretty much, everything I do is loosely inspired by FOTNS.") "Finn going insane" ... [6] (Check on source 6, successful, "And Finn going insane was I think all Rebecca. ") "a dense première that evokes nearly all aspects of this series."[4] (Check on source 4, successful, "The Dog” is more focused on humor and relationships, and the result is a dense première that evokes nearly all aspects of this series.") "an action-packed, mythology-heavy chapter" ... [4] (Check on source 4, successful, "“Finn The Human” is an action-packed, mythology-heavy chapter, ...") "nice change of pace".[4] (Check on source 4, successful, "This two-parter is a nice change of pace, but it’s nice to be back in the rainbow-colored world of Ooo.") "irreverent and narratively engaging".[8] (Check on source 8, successful, "... more clearly represents the progress of the medium: Irreverent and narratively engaging, ...") "the ideal testament to animation's glorious pliability in an commercial arena otherwise defined by restrictions."[8] (Check on source 8, successful, "... it's the ideal testament to animation's glorious pliability in an commercial arena otherwise defined by restrictions.") "sad subtext" ... [8] (Check on source 8, successful, "... toys with an incredibly sad subtext: The world has been destroyed in something called The Great Mushroom War.") "deny the bad vibes their surrounding world invites" ... [8] (Check on source 8, successful, "Through friendship and playtime, the characters seemingly deny the bad vibes their surrounding world invites.") "cheery songs and vibrant artwork" were some of the series strongest points.[8] (Check on source 8, successful, "The cheery songs and vibrant artwork remain sincere while challenging the backdrop at the same time.") "interesting creative challenge".[8] (Check on source 8, successful, " provided an interesting creative challenge for Ward and his team: a prolonged running time of half an hour, which basically amounted to a double episode.") Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA

• c. No original research:  Done

WP:NOR:
Done Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done

3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

Done Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources: Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS: Check for Out of scope: Check for The range of material that belongs in the article: Check for All material that is notable is covered: Check for All material that is referenced is covered: Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered: Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge: Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

b. Focused:
Done Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH): Check for Article size (WP:TOO LONG!):

4: Neutral

WP:NPOV:

Done 4. Fair representation without bias:  Done Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license)

Images:

Done 6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  Done Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  Done Image 1 (Ming-Na 4.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works. Image 2 (Kumail Nanjiani by Gage Skidmore.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works. Check for copyright status:  Done Image 1 (Ming-Na 4.jpg): Free. Image 2 (Kumail Nanjiani by Gage Skidmore.jpg): Free. Check for non-free content (WP:NFC): None Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR): NA 6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  Done Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  Done Image 1 (Ming-Na 4.jpg): Relevant. Image 2 (Kumail Nanjiani by Gage Skidmore.jpg): Relevant. Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE): None Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  Done Caption: "The episode guest starred Kumail Nanjiani (left) and Ming-Na Wen (right) among others." succinct and informative

As per the above checklist, the issues identified are:

• The lead does not provide an accessible overview. Major Points like the Plot and the Reception are not the concise summaries of their respective sections.
• The lead does not give relative emphasis to the Reception as is given in the body.
• Short paragraphs generally do not warrant their own subheading. Merge Background and Events sections into the Plot.
• Paragraphs should be long enough to develop an idea. Fix other short paragraphs.
• No inline citations for the direct quotations: "never even ever existed." and "mutagenic bomb".
• No end quote "loosely inspired by the Japanese manga series. It should be after inspired as per source 6.

This article is a very promising GA nominee. I'm delighted to see your work here. I'm putting the article on hold. All the best! --Seabuckthorn ♥ 05:32, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

Thank you for performing a very thorough review of this article. How do these changes look?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 02:13, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

Good. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 02:19, 12 January 2014 (UTC)

OK, everything looks good now. Passing the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 02:19, 12 January 2014 (UTC)