Talk:Doug Ireland/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 00:24, 3 December 2014 (UTC)

Infobox

• A caption should be given for the image, especially since it is a non-free image
• I see nothing in the article supporting a religious affiliation, birth date, or birth place- this needs to be fixed

Lead

• This is too short to adequately summarize the article and needs to be expanded to at least two paragraphs. There are also quotes used here never used in article body. This should include all major points of his life.

Professional

• There should be mention of how Ireland first became involved with the Dump Johnson movement
• Is "stint" the best word choice for "After a stint as a journalist on the New York Post"?
• How does "Ireland played a studio executive in Woody Allen's Stardust Memories" connect with anything else in the article as a singular sentence?

Journalism

• "He lived for ten years in France, writing on European politics and culture for various publications; and he continued to write frequently about French and European politics and foreign affairs. Ireland was an assiduous promoter in the United States of the work of the prolific young French philosopher Michel Onfray." has a tag which should've been addressed prior to this review
• "Ireland was a columnist for the Village Voice, the New York Observer New York magazine"..... add "and" after "Observer". "Village Voice" should read The Village Voice, and "New York Observer" should read The New York Observer.
• In These Times should be italicized
• "Bakchich" should link to Bakchich (internet)
• The Nation should be italicized
• "However, Sifry added that Ireland 'was more right than not ... in the grand sense.'" also has a tag that shouldn't have been here before a GAN
• Gay City News should be italicized

Criticism

• "Ireland’s" → "Ireland's" per MOS:QUOTEMARKS
• "Gay City News" again needs to be italicized
• I'm not sure if "to the end" is the best phrasing in "Long remained a critic of Ireland to the end"

Personal

• Not sure if Christopher Hitchens and Gore Vidal need to be mentioned
• It would help to include what prompted Ireland to give up liquor, and when he started/stopped drinking
• Why is there no detail on how he contracted the illnesses listed?
• "He also survived at least two major strokes"..... something about this doesn't read very well
• If known, I would include the cause of his death

Activism

• Unlink Bill Clinton as he was previously linked in the "Journalism" section per WP:OVERLINK
• "A severe critic from the left of President Bill Clinton's presidency, Ireland for three years wrote a syndicated Clinton Watch column"..... awkward phrasing
• How about providing details on what Ireland said of Clinton? Same for George H. W. Bush and George W. Bush
• The second paragraph just lists fact after fact without any elaboration or connection
• LGBT-related work seems to come in out of nowhere

References

• FN1: Bare URL, which is subject to linkrot. This should be filled out
• FN2: The publisher is not "gaycitynews.com" for Gay City News- URL's are not publishers.
• FN3: "Observer.com" is NOT the publisher for The New York Observer- see reason in FN2
• FN4: Not sure if "Truthdig" is reliable, and again the URL (truthdig.com) is NOT the publisher
• FN5: Is "A Paper Bird" reliable?
• FN7: Remove "magazine" from "New York Magazine"
• FN9: With the ISSN in place, is doi needed?
• FN's 10, 11, and 12: same as FN5
• FN15: Missing a work parameter

Overall

• Well-written?:

• Prose quality: could use some copyediting
• Manual of Style compliance: underuse of italics and needs a new, longer lead section

• Verifiable?

• Reference layout: Formatting needs work
• Reliable sources: Some questionable references
• No original research: Five unsourced pieces

• Broad in coverage?

• Major aspects: There is nothing on his early life, nothing on how he became interested in his work, nothing on his family, nothing on how he contracted his illnesses, barely anything outside of his primary career, and one sentence isn't much for LGBT-related work. Adding quotes from Ireland himself on his life and work could highly help.
• Focused: the brief mentions of LGBT-related work and other information somewhat throw off the focus as they don't connect much to the rest of the article. When a paragraph just lists fact after fact without connection, it also throws off focus.

• Neutral?: Looks OK

• Stable?: Nothing of concern

• Illustrated, if possible, by images?

• Appropriate licensing: FUR for infobox image (only picture used in article) is adequate
• Relevance and captioning: the image is relevant, but is missing a caption

• Pass or Fail?: I am failing this without putting on hold as there is too little outside of Ireland's primary career, prose and referencing are also not up to par. Do more research and thoroughly expand the article before renomination.