Talk:Dhivya Suryadevara

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Edit Request

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NOTE: I am proposing this edit for FleishmanHillard on behalf of General Motors. I am a paid editor and am aware of the COI guidelines. I am submitting this edit request to propose revisions and additions to the article in hopes of making the article more accurate and complete.

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Infobox

  1. Currently, the institutions included in the alma mater section of the Infobox could be more accurate. Ethiraj College for Women is an affiliate of the University of Madras and the articles cited report she attended the University of Madras.
  2. Suggest: Removing Ethiraj College for Women and adding the CFA Institute, where Suryadevara also attended. The revised, proposed Alma Mater section would read:

University of Madras, Institute of Charted Accountants of India, Harvard Business School, CFA Institute. [1]

Dhivya Suryadevara

  1. Currently, the article begins with Dhivya’s title and includes her Fortune Magazine award.
  2. Suggest: Removing “She was named by Fortune Magazine among the 40 of the most influential and inspiring young people.” This information will be included in the proposed awards section below. The proposed new introduction would read:

Dhivya Suryadevara is the first female Chief Financial Officer of General Motors. [2] [3]

Early Life

  1. Currently, the section only includes her familial background.
  2. Suggest: adding two new sentences about her hometown and early education to provide more information to the section. The proposed updated early life section would read:

Suryadevara grew up in Chennai, India. [4] She lost her father at a young age and was brought up along with her two sisters by her mother. [5] Suryadevara came to the U.S. at age 22 to attend Harvard Business School. [6]

Education

  1. Currently, the section includes Ethiraj College for Women as a university Dhivya attended. Similar to the change to the infobox, it would be more accurate to say she attended the University of Madras, as Ethiraj College for Women is an affiliate of the university.
  2. Suggest replacing Ethiraj College for Women with the University of Madras, and reordering the universities to be accurate chronologically. With the proposed changes, the new education section would read:

She studied at St John's Senior Secondary School in Mandaveli, Chennai [7] and completed her bachelor’s and master’s degrees in commerce at the University of Madras [8] She also earned an MBA from Harvard Business School [9] and is a chartered accountant charted accountant and CFA charterholder. [10]

Career

  1. Currently, the career section is missing information about her career path and includes an inaccuracy about the chronology of her early career.
  2. Suggest replacing the existing Career section with the information drafted below, which corrects the aforementioned inaccuracy and adds additional information to the chronology of her career. The new proposed career section would read:

Suryadevara worked at PricewaterhouseCoopers while attending the University of Madras. [11] In 2002, she interned at the World Bank. [12] After graduating from Harvard Business School, Suryadevara worked in investment banking at UBS. [13] Suryadevara joined General Motors in 2005 as a senior financial analyst. [14] In 2013, she was appointed CEO and chief investment officer of GM Asset Management. [15] Two years later, she also was named General Motors’s vice president of finance and treasurer [16] and was responsible for the company’s balance sheet, capital planning and world banking. [17] In 2017, Suryadevara was appointed General Motors’ vice president of corporate finance [18] with responsibility for investor relations and corporate financial planning. [19] She became CFO of General Motors effective September 1, 2018. [20]

Awards

  1. Suggest adding an awards section to capture the award is currently at the beginning of the article and include one addition. The proposed section would read:

Suryadevara was named in Fortune’s “40 Under 40” in 2015 and 2018. [21] In 2016, she was named an Automotive News Rising Star [22] and named to World Economic Forum’s list of Young Global Leaders. [23]

References

  1. ^ "CFA Institute Member Profile". CFA Institute. Retrieved June 5, 2019. Dhivya Suryadevara, CFA
  2. ^ "Here's How Much Money GM's First Female CFO Could Make". Money. Retrieved May 30, 2019. General Motors' first female chief financial officer could earn about $5 million during her first year on the job — roughly $2 million less than at least one male counterpart. Dhivya Suryadevara, 39, is set to succeed GM veteran Chuck Stevens as the automaker's CFO on Sept. 1.
  3. ^ "Dhivya Suryadevara: From St John's, Chennai to General Motors CFO". The New Indian Express. Retrieved May 30, 2019. Indian-American Dhivya, who recently became General Motors first female Chief Financial Officer (CFO)
  4. ^ "GM's new 39-year-old CFO Dhivya Suryadevara is making history". CNBC. Retrieved May 30, 2019. That was the theme of her upbringing in Chennai, India.
  5. ^ "Who is Dhivya Suryadevara?". The Hindu. Retrieved May 30, 2019. She lost her father at a young age, and it was her mother's responsibility to raise her and two sisters.
  6. ^ "GM's new 39-year-old CFO Dhivya Suryadevara is making history". CNBC. Retrieved May 30, 2019. When she was 22, Suryadevara traveled to the U.S. for the first time to attend Harvard Business School, where she got an MBA.
  7. ^ "Dhivya Suryadevara: From St John's, Chennai to General Motors CFO". The New Indian Express. Retrieved May 30, 2019. The 1996 batch of St John's Senior Secondary School (Mandaveli) are a proud group since Thursday.
  8. ^ "GM's new 39-year-old CFO Dhivya Suryadevara is making history". CNBC. Retrieved May 30, 2019. Her mother's high expectations stayed with Suryadevara as she completed her bachelor's and master's degree in commerce at the University of Madras.
  9. ^ "GM's new 39-year-old CFO Dhivya Suryadevara is making history". CNBC. Retrieved May 30, 2019. When she was 22, Suryadevara traveled to the U.S. for the first time to attend Harvard Business School, where she got an MBA.
  10. ^ "General Motors names Dhivya Suryadevara as CFO". The Hindu Business Line. Retrieved May 30, 2019. She is a Chartered Financial Analyst and a Chartered Accountant.
  11. ^ "Meet Dhivya Suryadevara, General Motors' new Indian American CFO". The American Bazaar. Retrieved May 30, 2019. Suryadevara's first job in India was at PricewaterhouseCoopers' Assurance and Business Advisory Services, while she was still a student at University of Madras.
  12. ^ "GM's new 39-year-old CFO Dhivya Suryadevara is making history". CNBC. Retrieved May 30, 2019. The effort paid off when Suryadevara landed an internship in 2002 at the World Bank.
  13. ^ "Meet Dhivya Suryadevara, General Motors' new Indian American CFO". The American Bazaar. Retrieved May 30, 2019. after completing her MBA from Harvard, she worked for UBS Investment Bank as an Associate Director for three years.
  14. ^ "GM's fast-rising CFO takes on high-speed strategy". Automotive News. Retrieved May 30, 2019. The 39-year-old CFO, who will add corporate strategy and development to her duties on Jan.1, has quickly risen through the ranks of the company since starting as a senior financial analyst in 2005.
  15. ^ "This is how much money GM's 1st female CFO could earn". Detroit Free Press. Retrieved May 30, 2019. Prior to that, from 2013 to 2017, Suryadevara was CEO and CIO of GM Asset Management running GM's $85-billion pension operations.
  16. ^ "GM's new 39-year-old CFO Dhivya Suryadevara is making history". CNBC. Retrieved May 30, 2019. while running GM's $85 billion pension operations, she also took on the role as vice president of finance and treasurer in 2015.
  17. ^ "GM's fast-rising CFO takes on high-speed strategy". Automotive News. Retrieved May 30, 2019. Before becoming CFO, Suryadevara oversaw GM's balance sheet, including capital planning, capital market activities and worldwide banking.
  18. ^ "GM's new 39-year-old CFO Dhivya Suryadevara is making history". CNBC. Retrieved May 30, 2019. In 2017 she became vice president of corporate finance.
  19. ^ "This is how much money GM's 1st female CFO could earn". Detroit Free Press. Retrieved May 30, 2019. with responsibility for corporate financial planning and investor relations.
  20. ^ "This is how much money GM's 1st female CFO could earn". Detroit Free Press. Retrieved May 30, 2019. In June, GM named Dhivya Suryadevara, 39, as its CFO effective Sept. 1.
  21. ^ "Dhivya Suryadevara, 39". Fortune. Retrieved May 30, 2019. Dhivya Suryadevara, 39.
  22. ^ "RISING STARS/OEM SUPPLIERS". Automotive News. Retrieved May 30, 2019. Dhivya Suryadevara, 36 Vice president of finance and treasurer, General Motors.
  23. ^ "5 people in finance under 40 who are changing the world". Business Insider. Retrieved May 30, 2019. Dhivya Suryadevara, General Motors.

Thank you for your consideration! Taylorcanderson (talk) 19:47, 7 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply 09-JUN-2019

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Below you will see where proposals from your request have been quoted with reviewer decisions and feedback inserted underneath, either accepting, declining or otherwise commenting upon your proposal(s). Please read the enclosed notes within the proposal review section below for information on each request.  Spintendo  15:38, 9 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

Proposal review 09-JUN-2019

University of Madras, Institute of Charted Accountants of India, Harvard Business School, CFA Institute
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Removing "She was named by Fortune Magazine among the 40 of the most influential and inspiring young people."
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Suryadevara grew up in Chennai, India. She lost her father at a young age and was brought up along with her two sisters by her mother. Suryadevara came to the U.S. at age 22 to attend Harvard Business School.
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She studied at St John's Senior Secondary School in Mandaveli, Chennai and completed her bachelor’s and master’s degrees in commerce at the University of Madras She also earned an MBA from Harvard Business School and is a chartered accountant charted accountant and CFA charterholder.
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Suryadevara was named in Fortune’s “40 Under 40” in 2015 and 2018.
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In 2016, she was named an Automotive News Rising Star and named to World Economic Forum’s list of Young Global Leaders.
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  1. ^ This part of the edit request proposal was declined because it uses the phrase "lost her father", the use of which is deprecated. Although some readers may be familiar with the use of "loss" as a term for someone who has died, others may see the term as simply meaning that the individual is missing. See MOS:EUP.
  2. ^ This part of the edit request contains duplicate references. See WP:REPCITE.
  3. ^ These claims are not Wikilinked to their respective articles, i.e. Automotive news rising star, etc.

Clarification Requested for Edit Request Feedback

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NOTE: I am seeking clarification on an edit request response for FleishmanHillard on behalf of General Motors. I am a paid editor and am aware of the COI guidelines.

@Spintendo: Thank you for reviewing the edit request and implementing changes. Could you please provide clarity on your comment that the claims In 2016, she was named an Automotive News Rising Star [1] and named to World Economic Forum’s list of Young Global Leaders. [2] were not Wikilinked to their respective sources? Since we provided sourcing, we weren’t clear on how to address your feedback here. Thank you for your consideration. Taylorcanderson

References

  1. ^ "RISING STARS/OEM SUPPLIERS". Automotive News. Retrieved May 30, 2019. Dhivya Suryadevara, 36 Vice president of finance and treasurer, General Motors.
  2. ^ "5 people in finance under 40 who are changing the world". Business Insider. Retrieved May 30, 2019. Dhivya Suryadevara, General Motors.

Reply 20-JUN-2019

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Thank you for your question.

  1. The claims that in 2016 she was named an Automotive News Rising Star and named to World Economic Forum’s list of Young Global Leaders are not WikiLinked. Having the title which is bestowed WikiLinked in Wikipedia indicates that the title is independently notable because it has its own article. The Automotive News newsletter names its sections where information is given about certain automotive-industry-related-individuals as "Rising Star". The fact that the newsletter has given this distinction to the subject would not normally be noted in an article. Asking for the title to be Wikilinked is a way of assuring that the title is noteworthy of mention.
  2. The title of World Economic Forum’s list of Young Global Leaders for example, is capable of being Wikilinked — and therefore able to be added to the article. Regards,  Spintendo  20:17, 20 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

@Cordless Larry: Since this scenario was eerily reminiscent of our earlier issue, I was hoping I could get your feedback on whether to add this requested claim.

The COI editor here would like to add the label "World Economic Forum’s list of Young Global Leaders" to this subject's list of accolades. A reputable source verifies the label and the WEF's press release mentions her. However, a search of the World Economic Forum's main page listings of the Young Global Leaders makes no mention of her, — her name is completely skipped over.

This was in 2016 which should have been more than enough time to fix any error, if there was an error. But whose error could it have been, the press release or the main database listings? Asking which sources were more numerous would not help (2 or more sources saying she is, while 1 source is silent) because those saying she was given the label can all be traced back to a single press release. So the comparison would actually be 1 to 1. Whom to believe? Any feedback you can offer would be most appreciated. Thank you!    Spintendo  21:04, 20 June 2019 (UTC)Reply

In the other case, it didn't really surprise me that the person concerned wasn't listed on the university website, Spintendo, because my experience of university websites is that they're often poorly maintained. In this case, it's a little more surprising that the person isn't listed, when they are named in a press release. My inclination would be to just go with what the press release says, but you might want to ask others for their opinions. Incidentally, I'm not really sure I understand your point about the need for there to be articles about things mentioned in this article. As noted at WP:NNC, the criteria applied an article are not the same as those applied to the content inside it. Cordless Larry (talk) 09:16, 21 June 2019 (UTC)Reply
I am familiar with content requirements vs article creation requirements. Requiring the award to be WikiLinked is simply my way of ensuring that awards such as Best Automotive News Rising Star 2016 do not fall under WP:PROMO. Regards,  Spintendo  22:10, 14 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Edit Request

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NOTE: I am proposing this edit for FleishmanHillard on behalf of General Motors. I am a paid editor and am aware of the COI guidelines. I am submitting this edit request to propose revisions and additions to the article in hopes of making the article more accurate and complete.

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@Spintendo: Thank you for providing that context. In reviewing the article, there are now a few chronological inaccuracies in the Career section that we wanted to bring to your attention. Please see below for recommended updates.

Career

  1. Currently, the career section is not in chronological order and includes incorrect dates.
  2. Suggest replacing the first three sentences of the Career section with the following sentences to reflect the correct chronological order and accurate dates related to Dhivya’s career.

Suryadevara started her career at PricewaterhouseCoopers while attending the University of Madras. [1]

She then interned at the World Bank in 2002 and went on to UBS as an investment banker. [2]

She joined General Motors in 2004. [3]

References

  1. ^ "Meet Dhivya Suryadevara, General Motors' new Indian American CFO". The American Bazaar. Retrieved May 30, 2019. Suryadevara's first job in India was at PricewaterhouseCoopers' Assurance and Business Advisory Services, while she was still a student at University of Madras.
  2. ^ "GM's new 39-year-old CFO Dhivya Suryadevara is making history". CNBC. Retrieved May 30, 2019. The effort paid off when Suryadevara landed an internship in 2002 at the World Bank before joining UBS as an investment banker.
  3. ^ "GM appoints new vice president of finance and treasurer". The Detroit News. Retrieved June 27, 2019. Suryadevara started at GM in 2004 in the treasury area.

Thank you for your consideration. Taylorcanderson (talk) 15:51, 14 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply 14-AUG-2019

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   Edit request implemented    Spintendo  22:18, 14 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Edit Request

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NOTE: I am proposing this edit for FleishmanHillard on behalf of General Motors. I am a paid editor and am aware of the COI guidelines. I am submitting this edit request to add additional information on Dhivya’s career.

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  1. Currently, the article only includes one of Dhivya’s awards.
  2. Suggest adding awards Dhivya’s received to provide additional information on her career.

Suryadevara was named to Fortune's 40 Under 40 in 2015 and their Most Powerful Women Leaders To Watch list in 2018. [1] In 2019, AutomotiveNews named Suryadevara to its 2019 All Stars List. [2] MotorTrend also named Suryadevara to its 2020 Power List. [3]

References

  1. ^ "These 10 Powerful Women Leaders Are Ones to Watch". Fortune. Retrieved December 13, 2019. Fortune is closely tracking the careers of these 10 star executives, all of whom could someday land a spot on our Most Powerful Women list.
  2. ^ "Automotive News All Stars". Automotive News. Retrieved December 13, 2019. 2019 ALL STAR Finance Dhivya Suryadevara CFO General Motors
  3. ^ "2020 MotorTrend Person of the Year: Who's the Biggest Player in the Auto Industry?". Motor Trend. Retrieved December 13, 2019. Chief Financial Officer, General Motors 2019 Rank Unranked

Thank you for your consideration. Taylorcanderson (talk) 21:10, 13 December 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply 13-DEC-2019

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   Clarification requested  

  1. By their very nature, awards can be subjective, in that they represent a very specific point of view: that of the individual or organization which determines who wins the award and why. To counter this, my own practice is to limit the listing of awards to only those which are independently notable in Wikipedia.[a]
  2. To include a list of awards here, please ensure that only awards which are independently notable in Wikipedia are listed in the request.[b] An example for this would be the Fortune magazine's Most Powerful Women Leaders To Watch. While Fortune magazine and certain awards it gives out are notable, the Most Powerful Women Leaders To Watch award appears not to be notable.
  3. When ready to proceed with the list of independently notable awards, kindly change the {{request edit}} template's answer parameter to read from |ans=yes to |ans=no. Thank you!

Regards,  Spintendo  22:16, 13 December 2019 (UTC)Reply

Notes

  1. ^ An award which is independently notable is recognized by having its own article in Wikipedia.
  2. ^ What the reviewer is asking for here is not due to WP:N (which is not a content requirement). The request for notability in this case is to ensure WP:NPOV. The adding of several points of view to an article in the form of an awards section may skew the article's balance.[1] Thus, this reviewer's own practice is to limit the listing of awards to those which are independently notable in Wikipedia.

References

  1. ^ "WP:BALANCE". Wikipedia. 20 July 2019. ...articles should not give minority views or aspects as much of or as detailed a description as more widely held views or widely supported aspects.