Talk:Caesar Hull/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 09:23, 10 February 2014 (UTC)

I will take this one. Comments will follow later this week. Zawed (talk) 09:23, 10 February 2014 (UTC)

Thanks Zawed. —Cliftonian (talk) 17:38, 10 February 2014 (UTC)

Comments as follows:

Infobox

• Should his allegiance be to the UK?

• Well, yes, he was in the Royal Air Force. Normally I would put both the UK and his country of origin, but decided not to this time as he moved to England and joined the RAF directly; it wouldn't seem entirely accurate to me to put Southern Rhodesia, and it also wouldn't seem right to me to put South Africa. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

• OK. Zawed (talk) 08:28, 13 February 2014 (UTC)

Early life

• Don't suppose there is any info regarding his boxing career?

• Not that I could find, but I do agree this is an area that needs expanding. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

Early war

• "Hull, Carey and two others together downed another Heinkel on 28 March 1940." Was this a He III?

• Yes. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

Norway

• "...the pilots took off from the sea on 21 May..." Took off from the sea? I know what you are trying say but maybe rephrase? "...took off on 21 May while at sea..."?

• Good idea, have changed —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

• "Heinkel He 111 " a little inconsistent in presentation as you have referred to them simply as He III (apart from first usage) in previous section. Later on it becomes Heinkel.

• Have changed usages to He 111 to remove ambiguity. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

• "...during 70 combats." This doesn't feel right; "during 70 combat missions."?

• How about "during 70 dogfights"? —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

• Feltwebel, Oberleutnant:link the ranks? And isn't it Feldwebel?

• Yes. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

• "...and forced to crash near the Bodø airfield.": Is this airfield the same as the one mentioned in the 2nd para of this section? If so, the link should be moved.

• Yes. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

Battle of Britain; death

• I think the rank in the quote box should be recited in full.

• Okay. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

Other stuff

• Image tags look appropriate
• Duplicate link in lead: Distinguished Flying Cross (first usage is as post-nominal)

• I think this is justified as the second usage is in full in the prose of the lead as opposed to in acronym form after his name. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

• Fair enough. Zawed (talk) 08:28, 13 February 2014 (UTC)

• No dab links
• Checklinks tool shows links working OK

This article covers its subject reasonably broadly and is well referenced with reliable sources. The above comments are really just nitpicks. Zawed (talk) 10:14, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

• Thank you Zawed for the review and the kind words. I hope my changes are satisfactory. —Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)

• Changes all good, passing as GA. Zawed (talk) 08:28, 13 February 2014 (UTC)