Talk:Brainstorm (2000 film)

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Neue Zürcher Zeitung

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I've found a commentary on the film by the newspaper Neue Zürcher Zeitung: http://www.nzz.ch/aktuell/startseite/article7KAAY-1.462597. However, it's in German and I don't know how to translate it. Someone could help me? Gabriel Yuji (talk) 21:26, 26 October 2014 (UTC)Reply

Copy-edit

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Hello! I have finished copy-editing the article as requested on the GOCE page. Please let me know if there are any questions or concerns! Thanks, karatalk 21:56, 14 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

Well, Satkara, thanks. I'd only ask you to check if I clarified the sentences you've requested. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 20:08, 15 November 2014 (UTC)Reply
I think you've clarified everything well, and that it is about ready for a GA nomination. There is still a citation needed tag on the seven-headed beast explanation (I assume you can cite a definition that is related to the phrase, but not the film itself). I'd also suggest that you change "It was subsequently acclaimed, receiving several..." to "it subsequently received several...", because the article suggest that it was not acclaimed overall, just primarily by domestic critics. karatalk 22:28, 15 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:33, 22 February 2015 (UTC)Reply


Should complete this one soon Jaguar 17:33, 22 February 2015 (UTC)Reply

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Initial comments

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  • "The film tells the story of Neto (Santoro)" - no need to mention who plays the character(s) in the lead
  • "Bodanzky chose to make it a documentary-like film" - bit informal. How about "documentary style" or something similar?
  • "After being rewritten five times, the script was shot in early 2000" - the 'script' was shot?
  • The lead summarises the article well, ableit some parts could be reworded, but this part meets the GA criteria
  • "The films ends with Neto and his father seated side by side curbside. Wilson cries" - those two short sentences are very choppy! The part with Wilson crying could be merged with this sentence, with something like by the side curbside, with Wilson crying?
  • 'Nurse' should be capitalised in the Cast section
  • "The film paved the way for new thinking about psychiatric institutions in Brazil which led to a law approved by Congress that forbid such institutions" - this standalone sentence should either be expanded or merged in one of the sub sections here

References

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  • No dead links, but according to the toolserver there one ref is missing an access date

On hold

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Looks like a solid article. I could only spot some choppy sentences but other than the all sections comply per the criteria and the references are also formatted. I'll leave this on hold for the standard seven days. Thanks Jaguar 17:56, 22 February 2015 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review! I've (hopelly) fixed all issues. The ref withouth an accessdate is the book on Bibliography. As a book, I don't think it needs an accessdate. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 18:17, 22 February 2015 (UTC)Reply
Thank you for your fast response! Ah sorry I didn't notice it was part of the Bibliography, but nevertheless everything else checks out. We're good to promote this   Jaguar 18:29, 22 February 2015 (UTC)Reply
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