Talk:Bill Curtsinger

Jake-jakubowski (talk) 20:36, 17 December 2022 (UTC)

Promotional tone

@Quatchenerlo Would you be willing to discuss what portions of the article you considered to be written in a "Promotional tone". thanks. Jake-jakubowski (talk) 21:27, 17 December 2022 (UTC)

Hello @Jake-jakubowski, the section of the article entitled "Inspiring others" has a promotional tone. Quatchenerlo (talk) 00:47, 18 December 2022 (UTC)

Thank you, I'll rewrite it. Jake-jakubowski (talk) 00:52, 18 December 2022 (UTC)

@Quatchenerlo, I edited it, if you would mind reviewing. If tt's satisfactory, if you also wouldn't mind removing the 'Promotional tone' template, Bill Curtsinger. Thank you for letting me know. Jake-jakubowski (talk) 01:19, 18 December 2022 (UTC)

@Quatchenerlo, I edited it, if you would mind reviewing. If tt's satisfactory, if you also wouldn't mind removing the 'Promotional tone' template, Bill Curtsinger. Thank you for letting me know. Jake-jakubowski (talk) Jake-jakubowski (talk) 18:03, 19 December 2022 (UTC)

Hi @Jake-jakubowski, thanks, I just removed the template. Quatchenerlo (talk) 00:24, 20 December 2022 (UTC)

Awesome, thank you! Jake-jakubowski (talk) 00:34, 20 December 2022 (UTC)

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Advertisement

@Actualcpscm: Could you be specific as to which parts of the article are considered an advertisement and wording that promotes the subject in a subjective manner? I can reword or delete those areas. thank you. Jake Jakubowski (Talk) 11:59, 13 June 2023 (UTC)

I took out a lot of the exhibitions as that might have led to looking like an advertisement. i also swapped out the picture of the exhibition. Jake Jakubowski (Talk) 09:57, 14 June 2023 (UTC)

Something I'm still worried about is that a lot of the purported achievements are OR. For example, the paragraph beginning "The subjects of Curtsinger's stories have included..." provides an extensive list of subjects, but it is supported only by primary sources. Actualcpscm (talk) 11:29, 14 June 2023 (UTC)

@Actualcpscm: ok, gotcha. I will work on that today. Thank you Jake Jakubowski (Talk) 11:36, 14 June 2023 (UTC)

@Actualcpscm Ok, I think I fixed it. I downgraded the paragraph to avoid wp:puffery and used secondary sources. Jake Jakubowski (Talk) 16:22, 15 June 2023 (UTC)

Great stuff, thanks! Actualcpscm (talk) 17:01, 15 June 2023 (UTC)

 Thanks Jake Jakubowski (Talk) 21:37, 15 June 2023 (UTC)