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I've listed this article for peer review because…
The article is incomplete and contains consistently bad English.
Thanks, guruPhil.
Ruhrfisch comments: I note this editor has made exactly one edit (this nomination). Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- Article has one reference - needs many more. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
- Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- I removed two unsourced extensive quotations - these need refs and need to be discussed to be included (and preferably include only a part of the quote)
- Any chance for an image?
- Agree that language is poor and needs a copyedit - bullet lists should be converted to prose.
- Provide context for the reader - see WP:PCR
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 15:50, 16 September 2008 (UTC)